Path of Most Resistance: Part One

[bluetears07]

Title: Path of Most Resistance
Fandom: Sherlock (BBC)
Pairing: Sherlock/John
Summary: The Adjustment Bureau AU: John is meant to be with Sarah. It is Sherlock's job to ensure it, but John is full of surprises.
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Fanfiction.

Comments

[mushroom18]

This is so intriguing! If you wouldn't mind some nitpicks for this chapter:

and I don’t think to many people walk around -- too many
“A lot of doctor’s come here to unwind.” -- just 'doctors'
Hiesenberg uncertainty principle - Isn't it Heisenberg?
The distain is so thick that Sherlock automatically reconsiders being so obvious and so human. - disdain

I am really enjoying this so far. I like the idea of Mycroft as Chairman and John being determined and playful with Sherlock :)

[bluetears07]

Thank you for pointing those out. I totally missed them and have since corrected each one--my mind must have been somewhere else during that section. :D

I'm really glad you enjoyed this bit. Thank you very much for the feedback!

[anonymous]

This is fantastic! Absolutely brilliant!

[anonymous]

Oh this is brilliant! I thoroughly enjoyed it. (:

I hope you don't mind but I caught a few mistakes, too:
It’s is best attempt at appearing ‘defiant.’ -*his
Blunt and too the point would likely be the most successful way to obtain his goal. -*to