never expect your lives to finish at the same time

[blushandrecover]

(1050 words) // (pg13)
for 8 may 07.
set in fall out boy's “a little less sixteen candles…” music video vampire world // pete&ryan
here's the video, just in case

Sometime during the night
the black sky turned to dawn
and we covered our eyes,
dizzy from being up all night.
You grabbed my hand,
we ran outside
to the city not quite yet awake.
Can we call it what

Comments

[self_sustaining]

Hey, so this was really lovely. I have a soft spot for vampfic. My friend and I actually started a comm for it. (ahaha I'm not pimping, I swear)
But. The language was beautiful, and your diction is wonderful. I don't usually read things with Pete in them, just becasue that's weird to me.
The only thing I'd change is that I'd love for it to be longer. It's also nice how you danced around the sex; not acutally doing it. That's a habit I have.

Very nice. I liked it a lot.

[blushandrecover]

...There's a community? By God, pimp away! I can't get enough vampfic. Link me? I'll post this there, if that's alright.
I might write more on this, so that'd be like making it longer, alright? Thank you so much!

[self_sustaining]

vamp_bandslash
We'd love to have you. xD

[blushandrecover]

I feel so honored :)

[bluefuzzyelf]

This was beautiful and sort of heartbreaking. It's sparse writing and beautiful prose and wow. Really lovely. I love this kind of fic, where nothing is really explained, nothing is said outright, just by implication and sidelong glances at words. You've pulled it off perfectly. It's a gorgeous piece of writing.
Ryan is blinded by more headlights speeding past just as he climaxes, holding so tight to Pete, afraid that this isn’t real somehow. But Pete, he still kisses the same, still fucks the same, and that burning familiarity is all Ryan needs, because that’s real. Real as the pale expanse of Pete’s back as it arcs and he moans low.
Absolutely amazing.

[blushandrecover]

Thank you! I like to assume that the reader doesn't need everything explained to them; I don't want to baby anyone (it's condescending). If someone doesn't understand something, then they can make it mean whatever they wish.

[bestthingaround]

what a wonderful read. the language was amazing and little brilliant lines like "eternally emo" really made this piece. The sex here was soft and I think it really worked (especially since the rest of it was detached, it mirrored the story quite well); but I encourage you to give a try to the porn-y side of fiction. It's fun. :)

[blushandrecover]

I do really want to give it a try, I'm just afraid of the result a little. I'll try it soon, hopefully with another great prompt.
Thanks for your comment ♥

[notshybutsly]

I have such intense love for vampfic. This is great. It's really easy to be over the top with things like this but you kept it very real. They're both still so very in character and I love the sort of quietness of it, if that makes sense. Beautiful job.

[blushandrecover]

The prompt was very quiet to me, but with something raging underneath, and that's what I tried to portray. Thank you very much.

[ocelot_daemon]

This was really good. I don't really have anything constructive really, but I like the handprints opening and closing the story. Nice closure.

[blushandrecover]

Thanks! Did you check out the prompt? It's so damn beautiful, hence the handprints.