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[FIC] Easier Things

Jan 21, 2005 01:05

Title: Easier things (1/??)
Genre: Shounen ai, some fluff
Pairing: SasuNaru
Rating: G to PG

x-posted in sasuxnaru and bokuranoboken

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Comments 21

kooriyoukai January 20 2005, 18:10:47 UTC

That was very sweet and sad, I hope you plan to keep on going with this. It was a little bit confusing at the beginning who was doing the talking, since having two boys in the story makes it hard to discern between which "him" is being spoken of. Besides that, you might want to get a beta to go through it and clean up some of the tiny mistakes that appear easy enough to spot with one reading. You have a good handle on the characters and Naruto's emotions though, and I love how he compares the difficulties of confessing feelings to a guy as opposed to a girl. It's a shame there wasn't any dialogue, but you managed to pull things off nicely even without it. I'm really curious to find out what Sasuke's thinking now with Naruto's confession of his feelings floating around in his head. Hope to see more soon! ^_^

bokuranoboken January 21 2005, 06:29:21 UTC

I did have a lot of trouble differenciating which "he/him" I was talking about. Even I was confused for a while XD

Anyway, thank you for the comment. I will keep them in mind when writing the next chapter ^__^

evilsimon January 20 2005, 20:44:12 UTC

...wow.

nifty. :)

bokuranoboken January 21 2005, 06:29:35 UTC

Thank you =D

wigglynoodle January 21 2005, 00:35:48 UTC

I thought Sasuke was speaking at first...

Very good story, though. Exluding the dialogue makes Naruto sound detached. I love that effect. ;)

bokuranoboken January 21 2005, 06:30:32 UTC

It was confusing wasn't it?

Nonetheless, thank you for reading ^__^

prodigybombay January 21 2005, 00:52:14 UTC

I couldn't figure out whether it was naruto speaking or sasuke until the very end...lol, but then, its probably just my stupidity. XD ...your story seems really sweet, reading it made me go...=x=...kuuuuuuuute. hehhe. Keep working on your writing! I'm sure you'll write some great stuff with this style.

bokuranoboken January 21 2005, 06:32:08 UTC

No, it wasn't your fault... it was indeed confusing ^^; Thanks for taking time to read my fic and for the lovely comments.

seki_yumizu January 21 2005, 01:10:00 UTC

waaaaah so sweet >.<
Sequel~? sequel!!!
I like how you said Naruto thought "their rivalry was cool"
It sounds so him ^^

bokuranoboken January 21 2005, 06:32:40 UTC

A sequel will come eventually, don't worry ;D

Thanks for reading!