Off the Record (1/3)

[bonomanic]

Going back to China always felt like a rush during the first few days. Everything was a blur of colors and lights, moving from one place to the next, the constant focus required for understanding even a little of what was going on around him hurting Donghae’s brain. It was exhausting in a mental way that was so much worse than sore muscles after

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[bonomanic]

Spot for wineandpencils.

[bonomanic]

The rest of your Christmas present isn't finished yet, so be patient. /glare Even going back here won't help with that fact, so be patient. I'm working on it. ^^

I don't mind your capslock because THAT'S OUR WAY TO CONVEY EXCITEMENT AND LOVE AND EVERYTHING AWESOME IN THIS WORLD! :DDD

Yeah, Kyuhyun's snark in this one was... meh. But I can just pretend that it's because he's sensitive and not because I fail at snark, lol. AND I COULD SAY THAT WRITING THAT KISS WAS AWKWARD BECAUSE IT WAS, OKAY? AND THAT WAS ALSO NOT AT ALL WHAT I WAS TALKING ABOUT TWO DAYS AGO BECAUSE REMEMBER HOW THERE'S PART TWO AND THREE? YEAH? MORE KISSING TO COME. Also, this was supposed to be awkward. And omg, lol, I can see that family scene in my mind, it's hilarious. Because you would be the person to stare at your laptop, hyperventilating. xD They should've gotten used to it by now, methinks.

Hm, if this was hot, then I hope the next part won't disappoint. ^^''

[makyu]

Awesome!!!^^
I really liked it!
Can't wait for the second part!!

Thanks for writing!

[bonomanic]

Thank you! :) The next part should be up shortly.

[sung_gi]

Oh no! You can't leave me hanging like this!!! I want more!!

Anyway... Kyuhyun..! Aww! “I just think that it wouldn’t hurt to try,” Kyuhyun replied calmly, as if he was talking about ice cream flavors. Haha! He's genious! <3

Update soon! ^^

[bonomanic]

I won't leave you hanging for long, promise. :) The next one should be out tomorrow or the day after.

Yeah, well, Kyuhyun was a bit awkward in this part but I hope it gets better. His snark is hard to write. >.

[rubyls]

o FUCK I'm late D: I promised you I'd be all over this, didn't I :) so spot for later, I didn't realize you've posted it :(

[bonomanic]

Lol. Really, girl, don't worry about it. This won't run away. (Although damn, for some heart-stopping minutes earlier today I seriously considered deleting it from LJ because fucking Word screwed up my whole document so badly when I pressed my key combination to save that it disappeared from my laptop. DDDDD: And then I fortunately managed to recover it from the tmp file but I had to read up on that shit first and I really thought the whole fourteen pages were lost forever, in the middle of the smut, too, and I was so close to dying and damning it all. But yeah, I got my story back and this won't go away. :D) And as I told you on the Kyumin post, I stan late comments just as much as early ones. :)

[rubyls]

CRYING GINA WHAT IS THIS WHERE ARE PARTS 2 AND 3?! YOU KNOW I'M IMPATIENT AS FUCK I HATE WAITING OK WHERE IS THE ACTIONNNNNNNNNNNNNNN

/and again i back off the craycray

awwwww bb this was really lovely. pretty prose, i like your nuances because then it's not just plain describing, it's filling in the colors for a b&w picture. the hug made me d'awwwwww a whole lot, so this is what kyuhae is about, huh? ;)

and the tension leading up to the kiss, oooooh *o* i loved it, it made for a very gripping read, and i was holding my breath ;)

the front part was really sad tho, especially kyuhyun, wtf D: boy does look lonely all the time, okay, even when he's the king of snark, and i swear those dead fish eyes he has when he's performing sometimes make me heartbroken because he looks so... dead. D:

and i love love love the dialogue, it is awfully them, and i always smile when i read dialogue that's well drawn out. your characterization \O/ props, bb because good characterization makes me continue reading a pairing that i don't normally

[bonomanic]

PART TWO IS COMING UP TONIGHT, OKAY? AND IF I HADN'T DONE THIS, YOU WOULD'VE HAD TO WAIT ANOTHER TWO OR THREE DAYS FOR ANYTHING AT ALL AND THEN YOU WOULDN'T HAVE HAD ANYTHING TO READ WHILE YOU'RE WAITING FOR YEMIN OR KYUNO OR WHATEVER, OKAY? *pout* AND WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT? IT HAS TO BUILD A BIT OKAY AND THEY CAN'T JUST GO AND HAVE HOT SECKS WITHOUT THERE FIRST BEING AN AWKWARD KISS BECAUSE IT'S MUCH MORE FUN THIS WAY.

Omo, thank you so much, Jay. <3 And, well, this is what my version of Kyuhae is all about at least. Or that's at least one aspect of it. They're comfortable around each other despite all of their differences. And I think they bring out sides in the other that might be very hidden otherwise, like Kyuhyun's caring heart or Donghae's ability to be a good, responsible hyung. It's not something people see immediately when they look at them, I guess. Anyways, no more character rambling.

I'm glad that it had at least a bit of tension, I wasn't so sure. >.< And omg, stupid dialogue, Kyuhyun is so fucking hard to write,

[molecule_d]

YOU TEASE.

[bonomanic]

I'M SORRY~~~! ;_______; New chapter tonight. I promise.