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bootler

Brigits_flame:Beseiged

Oct 23, 2008 22:45

[Note: okay, this one might require a little bit of background information. A friend of mine commented that Teri from Fuel would make a good werewolf from the "Werewolf: The Apocalypse" roleplaying game. I agree, so I'm giving it a shot ( Read more... )

writing, brigits_flame, werewolf

Comments 6

insolentscrawl October 25 2008, 03:19:05 UTC

I like the story. It took me a moment to get into it, because I got a little confused part-way through. However, overall, I really got into it toward the end. Good job and good luck this week.

bootler October 25 2008, 13:45:01 UTC

Thanks very much! Was there anything in particular you found confusing?

dioscorea October 30 2008, 00:36:03 UTC

Hi, I'm one of your editors this week. I really don't have much of anything to comment on, though! This was a very interesting piece. Normally I'm not very into stories involving werewolves and the like, but I enjoyed this. I read the first story after I read this one, and it was interesting to come back and reread this; Teri would indeed make a fine werewolf. You also do a great job creating very realistic, comfortable (not necessarily in content, but in sound, if that makes any sense) dialogue. Very solid writing! Good luck in the future :)

amri October 31 2008, 17:57:55 UTC

Hi - I'm doing your other edit this week.

This story was excellent. I loved all the descriptions you put into it. They were the perfect balance between what is written and what is implied.

The flow of the work was also a nice balance. As the reader, I got a little bit of information about each aspect of the story from each character until the end where it collected and made sense.

I only have one small comment. I don't recall reading your "Fuel" entry. At first I thought Teri was a dectective or FBI, something similiar. By the end of the story, it sounds more like she was a lawyer. The details of her work are a bit vague but it doesn't detract from the story.

Great job! Good luck!

harlotbug3 October 31 2008, 21:30:46 UTC

Mermaidbia was unable to help you today, so here I am to help the both of you…in theory. Lucky for all of us I’ve a degree in Literature, which means a lot of theory, if little else. Even luckier, I was an editor at the campus newspaper and literary magazine, which is something else ( ... )

suppishld October 31 2008, 23:30:48 UTC

like the story! Keep at it!