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48-hour fic!

May 21, 2009 10:47

Prompt: "she was unwilling to substitute fascination for trust, or beauty for sincerity" from Carl Steadman's 99 Secrets via intl_princessThis is The Mentalist. Lisbon and Jane working. Jane pov (which is fun because he knows everything ( Read more... )

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intl_princess May 21 2009, 02:02:24 UTC

Woo! I haven't ever seen the Mentalist, but now I want to.

(also, you should write the more)

pene May 21 2009, 02:38:17 UTC

it's a very good show with intriguing characters and hotness for many tastes. like Cho up here. I think he's pretty hot.

Suddenly I am quite the fan.

I may. or more likely I may start again with a new one. (I thought you were saying "you should write "the" more" and I thought... she's right. I remove "the" from sentences all the time.

intl_princess May 22 2009, 02:28:30 UTC

ha! no, i meant "the more". you have a nice number of actual "the"s.

mandysbitch May 21 2009, 03:52:54 UTC

So, so awesome! You know I love The Mentalist, you know I love Jane and Lisbon and you have to know I was gonna love this from the start. But aside from that, I just love how understated they are, how fraught with history and angst and stuff going on that they don't talk about. It's so them!

I love the Lisbon volunteers. You're right - what else would she do?

and I don't know why, but this:

He knows she is both fascinated by and fearful of him. He thinks she also likes him.

Just seemed so Jane to me.

(Also did you prompt furies okay?)

pene May 21 2009, 05:05:14 UTC

hooray! I'm so glad! hooray!

I did know I would have at least one audience member.

y'know I really wanted them to fall awwwww in loooove um... sappy romantic me. and also have sex. guh. but I reckon that would take a lot of writing because they're so fraught.

my current plan is to have someone in femslash09 write me a crossover where Lisbon and Reese from Life are sexily ever after. Sneaky and hot.

pene May 21 2009, 05:17:05 UTC

p.s. I prompted her by email but haven't heard if she got it. she may still be flying?

mandysbitch May 21 2009, 06:36:23 UTC

Yeah, I won't panic yet.

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gatefiction May 21 2009, 08:22:45 UTC

I haven't seen the Mentalist either, but now I want to. I want more of this, and I really want to know more about Lisbon and Jane... Thanks!

mandysbitch May 21 2009, 08:49:47 UTC

WAAAAAATCH THE MENTALIST! You know you wanna. The UST is beautifully understated and Patrick Jane is a joy and Lisbon is all kinds of sexy reserved (and she shouldn't like him but she does. I love that!).

And there are other cool characters too!

gatefiction May 21 2009, 12:07:19 UTC

OKAY I WILL!!!!!!!!!!!

vonniek June 10 2009, 15:44:13 UTC

I really like this glimpse at them. Of course Lisbon would volunteer. And there is Patrick's insight into her, which I find both attractive and repellent.

wiredferret June 10 2009, 16:43:12 UTC

Oh, nicely done. It's a very good Lisbon, her don't-touch body language, and Jane's INCESSANT PICKING AT IT. I am beginning to think she is elusive because it makes him crazy.