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Basic Character Info:

Name: He...has way too many of them. For all intents and purposes we'll just use "Demiurge".
Age: Really? ...Old. Very old. Predating humans old.
Gender: Male
Race: In this body? Vile. Overall? Holy Spirit (approx. translation of "Shinrei" provided by demonborntwiceRank: Above Herald/Seraph ( Read more... )

You know the drill for these things. Let me know how I'm doing, outright flames will be ignored, all that.

Anon is on, screening is on, IP logging is off, but I may unscreen replies at any time for the sake of carrying on a discussion.

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• "Thou" is second-person singular. "Ye" is second-person plural.
  
• "Thou" is used as the subject, "thee" is not. Same for "ye" and "you".
  
• "Thine" is used as the subject when the object after starts with a vowel, or when indicating possession of the subject ("this is yours" as opposed to "Your item is here."). "Thy" is used when it is the subject and ( Read more... )