Another nice update. I do always really enjoy it when Ryan at any age is plagued with nightmares. I like how Kirsten is letting her motherly instincts take over, especially since Ryan is more scared of Sandy.
About your plea for a beta. You might consider making a separate post on the OC Collection sight. I'm pretty sure it would be allowed there. I think more people would see it that way. I'm like Chic. I really enjoy your story, but there are a few places where you use the wrong word. That being said I am extremely impressed by you. I couldn't even manage "See Jane run" if I tried to write in French.
I would offer my services, but I am really not qualified to be anyone's beta. My punctuation is terrible...no, worse than terrible. However, if you ever want me to double check anything to see if it reads right just let me know. You can check my profile for my e-mail address.
Thanks for your comment! It really matters to me to read your opinion. About the beta, what's the adress of the OC Collection sight? I haven't written all the newt chapter (I'm back at home after 3 days of "break" and my boss e-mailed me a stack of files to deal with...I'm supposed to be on holiday.) , but if I don't find any beta, I'll probably send it to you to double check!
Sorry, I'm an idiot. I meant The OC Collective and you have already posted the links to your journal.
Bad, bad boss for bothering you on your holiday. My boss keeps coming in my ofice every fifteen minutes asking me how my projects are coming along. I wish I had the nerve to tell him that things would go a lot faster if he'd quit bothering me.
Sorry again. I'm still an idiot. I just re-read my previous comment. I meant to say the OC Collective is where you have already posted the links to this story, so you already familiar with the sight. Hope this makes more sense. I do tend to ramble and I need to get better about checking my comments before posting them.
I'm quite enjoying this; I've seen stories with similar concepts before and enjoyed them, but this is really sweet and I look forward to how you help Ryan recover from his past and grow and learn with the Cohens.
re. the beta, I'm more than happy to check the spelling and grammar for you, I'm just not as good on storylines and plot-related stuff. Email me if you want to. :)
Thanks for your nice comment! I'm currently writing the next chapter which is gonna be pretty long and I'll sent your by e-mail for you to check the spelling and grammar! It's really nice of you! :)
Wonderful scene with a maternal Kirsten, and a terrifed Ryan.The part with his nightmare was just almost too devestating to read.BTW,I friended you, is that alright?
A Brand New Lifeoc_gambit2January 1 2007, 04:20:23 UTC
Hi. I see you've already had an offer, but- in case you need extra help with the beta-work, let me know. Not that I've done it before, but I'm finding myself able to catch your [few and minor] mistakes pretty easily. I'm not sure how good I am with the characters and canon, but I've watched- and re-watched- and read a LOT, as well as wrestling with writing them at length. Don't have anything yet I feel led to post, but the exercise of trying to write AU's that remain in character may have given me some small skill
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I really enjoy this story. And Kirsten and Sandy in parental mode are always a pleasure to read.
Good idea with the beta. It will help you to improve your writing and your English. I would offer my help, but I'm German, so English is not my native tongue and I need help in that department myself.
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About your plea for a beta. You might consider making a separate post on the OC Collection sight. I'm pretty sure it would be allowed there. I think more people would see it that way. I'm like Chic. I really enjoy your story, but there are a few places where you use the wrong word. That being said I am extremely impressed by you. I couldn't even manage "See Jane run" if I tried to write in French.
I would offer my services, but I am really not qualified to be anyone's beta. My punctuation is terrible...no, worse than terrible. However, if you ever want me to double check anything to see if it reads right just let me know. You can check my profile for my e-mail address.
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About the beta, what's the adress of the OC Collection sight? I haven't written all the newt chapter (I'm back at home after 3 days of "break" and my boss e-mailed me a stack of files to deal with...I'm supposed to be on holiday.) , but if I don't find any beta, I'll probably send it to you to double check!
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Bad, bad boss for bothering you on your holiday. My boss keeps coming in my ofice every fifteen minutes asking me how my projects are coming along. I wish I had the nerve to tell him that things would go a lot faster if he'd quit bothering me.
Hope you have a Happy New Years!
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re. the beta, I'm more than happy to check the spelling and grammar for you, I'm just not as good on storylines and plot-related stuff. Email me if you want to. :)
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I'm currently writing the next chapter which is gonna be pretty long and I'll sent your by e-mail for you to check the spelling and grammar! It's really nice of you! :)
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Thanks for your comment!
I hope you enjoy the next chapters!
Happy New Year!
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And Kirsten and Sandy in parental mode are always a pleasure to read.
Good idea with the beta. It will help you to improve your writing and your English. I would offer my help, but I'm German, so English is not my native tongue and I need help in that department myself.
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Hope you'll like the next chapters :)
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