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Oct 21, 2011 16:22

The first time, I forced myself to look ( Read more... )

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raspberrydagger October 21 2011, 23:11:26 UTC
1. I love the first two stanzas, and especially their closing line. And pretty much all of it, but those things are the best.

2. I love your poetry in general. I wish I could write like you do! Actually, the rhythm in this one sounds like how my poetry tends to go, come to think of it, the flowing lines, la la la, last line duhn. (I think my prof called it "a lovely dissonance" or something.) But you actually write good stuff!

3. I love YOU.

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brattibebe October 22 2011, 21:22:11 UTC
Yeah, the first two stanzas could definitely stand alone.

Thank you. My poetic muse comes and goes in spurts; he is all kinds of amusement, but not very dependable/trustworthy.

I love you too!!

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