VENI - CHAPTER ONE

[a_m_a_t_u_s]

Title: Veni
Author: a_m_a_t_u_s
Rating (this chapter): PG for mentions of the word 'fuck' and 'cock'. Lol, idk.
Summary: Contention. Dan remembers nothing. Ben remembers everything. Written in Dan's POV.
Warnings: Spoilers galore. And my writing is horrible in this chapter.
Words: 1497. A little better, but not good enough. I probably have a gagillion

Comments

[blaidd_drwg]

...and I try to go back to sleep. I'm so tired. I'm so veryfuckinggoddamn tired. = this is definitely Dan's 'voice' :)

Ha! I half expected one of Dan's battlefield advocates to be or turn into Ben, kinda like the angel & the devil on your shoulder cliche', but this worked too. Dan no.2 pouting in the 'corner' - lol. I can see that.

Dan's reaction to the mention of Ben, unexpected, but loved it.

Looking forward to more.

[a_m_a_t_u_s]

... really? this is like, one of those 'test writings', where i try to get voices and perspectives and characterizations. @_@ i'm.. glad i'm making some kind of progress...

Dan numbers 1 & 2 just popped up out of nowhere. I figgered since Bale has a shitload of characters, he might have Bale numbers 1 & 2 as well, and put that into Dan. e___e

I hope you'll enjoy whatever bull I spit out next ;;

[keepmeturning51]

HAHAHA I like how his cock jumped!!! ;DDDD

[a_m_a_t_u_s]

8DDDD!!