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Out of Touch [Ontae] [PG-13] [1/1]

Jun 07, 2011 00:06

Title: Out of Touch
Pairing: Ontae
Genre: Sci-fi, General
Rating: PG-13 [Language]
Word Count: 4,135
Summary: They never know where, when, or if they'll find another like themselves.

( IThe blizzard hadn't been fore casted, but then, most fateful events in life aren't. )

ontae, shinee fanfiction, oneshot, pg-13, finished

Comments 18

queen_anything June 7 2011, 06:12:07 UTC

Spot for gooberso1. <3

gooberso1 September 25 2011, 23:23:59 UTC

oh my gosh, i can't believe that I never posted my comment!! I was going to but.. then I had to leave LJ for a little while. But, I'm back and finished re-reading it! I loved the story! You wrote it amazingly, with a little twist that I wasn't expecting!

Jinki cocks his head to the side, momentarily forgetting his pain. “Why are you wearing gloves? I'm not bleeding.”

“Germaphobic.”

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Of course, or maybe Jinki would have thought about the cold instead... it was the winter time. xD

“It's okay,” Jinki reassures, finally casting Taemin's glove off. He looks up, numb fingers wrapped around Taemin's just as chilling to the touch hand.

Taemin gapes at him “B-but, I've never .. I haven't been able to touch a person since - “

“Whatever you have, it can't affect me.”

Eyes rapidly blink as Taemin tries to fight back tears. He smiles down at Jinki's hand. “I,” his voice cracks,” I thought I was ... alone.” He falls to his knees beside Jinki, tears beginning to fall freely.

“You aren't.” I loved that part... it was so ( ... )

aeries_amethyst June 7 2011, 06:35:04 UTC

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Omg!!! You finally posted it!!! XD You know for some strange reason I thought this was going to be more than like 5k words...but I was wrong!!! :P

This story seems to have more mystery and suspense going on than scifi :O lol It's also like your explaining everything without explaining anything at all, I like it!! XD Also, I find it interesting that jinki ends up right back where he started continuously :) it's like fate I tell ya!!! XD

You already know that I love your stories so this one is no exception hun :P however I seem to be in a jongho mood right now for some strange reason, so my ontae sensors are completely neutral XD lololololol

queen_anything June 7 2011, 06:40:09 UTC

I know!!! I'm like, soooo relieved right now!

/coughs/ It was suppose to be more ... But it's okay at this length too. :D

I'm reaaaaally glad it came across that way! Gah, this was yet another dip into unfamiliar territory style wise, trying to be all mysterious. XD I'm glad it worked, though!

Ah, I'm working on an Onho right now? Does that help at all? XD I wish I could write you some Jongho ...

Thank you so much, my loyalest reader in the land. :) <3

ontaejongminkey June 7 2011, 06:58:20 UTC

asfhgsjkfhskjdgskjdghsdfgjhdlkaghdalkhgalkjg! *O*

/incoherent. be back when brain returns.
Naah~jk :)

This is just so suspense-y. If that is even a word. lmao
I love it! love it, love it, love it, love it~<3

Thank you so much for sharing!^^b

queen_anything June 7 2011, 15:57:15 UTC

:O I appreciate the kind words, dear!! <3

luvzcappietau June 7 2011, 16:37:35 UTC

Ah! Taeminnieeee ;o;

You're finisheddd, it seemed like only yesterday you were working so vigorously to get this done....

Yeah, it was only yesterday XD You are beaaaastttt!!!!

But uh, babe, you didn't change the 'no' to 'know' yet XD

Congrats on finishingggg!!! It was truly a great ending!

queen_anything June 7 2011, 17:36:48 UTC

Was the ending okaaay?! I know, isn't it funny how I thought just two hours before finishing it that I was going to take days longer ... XD

Oh, that's because I changed it right before I dropped my computer! Apparently it didn't save! ^^;;

Thank youuu, I would haven't been able to do this without you to support me! :*

kaybee38 June 7 2011, 20:00:29 UTC

This was wonderful!

queen_anything June 7 2011, 22:54:03 UTC

Thank you <3