pesence=presence? to large= too large? impares=impairs?
I just read all three of your poems. I think too often people read what their friends write, and, to spare their feelings, they don't say what they mean. I don't know you, though, so I can be objective and therefore far more valuable.
Frankly, I think your poems are boring. I'm not saying their badly written, but they are a little flat. Poetry is supposed to mean something to the reader and the writer- and to me, these poems mean nothing. The only thing that makes your poems seem poetic is that they rhyme- which is actually not so important, and usually quite restrictive.
Basically, it seems like not much effort was put into these poems. If you don't like to write poetry, that's fine, they're good enough to turn in (barring spelling and grammar errors). If you really consider yourself to be a good poet or at least write poetry for fun, I would say give them some more, and you could possibly make them great.
Wow are you just like so bored that you are stating your opinions on random people's journals....? I don't care what you think or anyone thinks about my writing really so sorry but wow what a waste of type.... and of course the poems mean nothing to you! You don't know me or even who they are about. They mean something to me obviously and that's why I wrote them. Or rather they did mean something at a time. And because it was a school project yes I did correct the grammatical errors but thank you for that lovey point out of mistakes at the top that was a nice gesture.
Yet I got an A on the project and a recomendation for publishing one of them...Well I guess those people must not know what they are talking about to want to publish my poem who ever heard of such a thing.....
I don't know you, though, so I can be objective and therefore far more valuable.
uh yea because I care so much about what you think....
But who am I to judge? I hate poetry.Then don't judge because the comments mean nothing to me and were not
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to large= too large?
impares=impairs?
I just read all three of your poems. I think too often people read what their friends write, and, to spare their feelings, they don't say what they mean. I don't know you, though, so I can be objective and therefore far more valuable.
Frankly, I think your poems are boring. I'm not saying their badly written, but they are a little flat. Poetry is supposed to mean something to the reader and the writer- and to me, these poems mean nothing. The only thing that makes your poems seem poetic is that they rhyme- which is actually not so important, and usually quite restrictive.
Basically, it seems like not much effort was put into these poems. If you don't like to write poetry, that's fine, they're good enough to turn in (barring spelling and grammar errors). If you really consider yourself to be a good poet or at least write poetry for fun, I would say give them some more, and you could possibly make them great.
But who am I to judge? I hate poetry.
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I don't care what you think or anyone thinks about my writing really so sorry but wow what a waste of type.... and of course the poems mean nothing to you! You don't know me or even who they are about. They mean something to me obviously and that's why I wrote them. Or rather they did mean something at a time. And because it was a school project yes I did correct the grammatical errors but thank you for that lovey point out of mistakes at the top that was a nice gesture.
Yet I got an A on the project and a recomendation for publishing one of them...Well I guess those people must not know what they are talking about to want to publish my poem who ever heard of such a thing.....
I don't know you, though, so I can be objective and therefore far more valuable.
uh yea because I care so much about what you think....
But who am I to judge? I hate poetry.Then don't judge because the comments mean nothing to me and were not ( ... )
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