Focus Pocus

May 21, 2008 13:26


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onesoul May 21 2008, 20:50:07 UTC
I don't disagree with you in the logical sense. I was thinking about how to respond to your comments yesterday.

First off, I liked the idea of a slightly smaller version of what feels like The Invitation -- poem (found on my profile page of lj if you are not already aware of the poem).

Secondly, I love that you sense your own irony here. It makes me smile.

For a third reason,I like my own imagination that this was created in a coffee shop somewhere and that it would make people stop and think.

Finally, I focus on the sapiosexual part of the poem... basically about the person is saying that they love the person's ideas/thoughts/words instead of something else. The tip off was my icon used in that post ;)

Perhaps, I am more of the spirit of the words rather than the actual law of it.

What I would like and what would please me is if YOU write a poem like this style with all the positive things. *smile*

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browascension May 21 2008, 22:16:00 UTC
I will write a poem like this for you, and keep it focused on the positive! That might take me a while; you know how I am with writing poems.

Thanks for sharing the things that make you happy. You have a very sexy brain, and a very sexy mind living in it.

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onesoul May 21 2008, 22:33:35 UTC
Awww, well the feeling is mutual indeed.

Side note, A came up with a game idea that involves ogdorm and while it may make you raise an eyebrow, I love the premise. *smile*

You are a featured character!!!

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browascension May 21 2008, 22:45:30 UTC
Ooh, maybe I'll raise both eyebrows.

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mudita May 21 2008, 20:54:56 UTC
Props for the cleaned up version, and insightful analysis.

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weiskind May 21 2008, 21:21:22 UTC
Delicious.

I also tend to see the spirit of such sentiments more than the letter, and the negativity doesn't come across to me as distracting.

But I believe that it actually is. I like your analysis here and I love that you've brought to my attention yet another way that I can strive to be clean and pure in my communication.

I want to write everyone lists now.

For you:

~I love that you drive a practical, funny looking car made out of cheese in which we were able to fall in love with each other's bodies. Your car is one of your tools, and well-chosen for your life.
~I love that you live in a neighborhood chosen as a way of facilitating closeness with one you love, and have created even more community and love around you in that place.
~I love the clarity and generosity with which you see people, and the patience you bring to interactions which allows you to connect with a huge variety of people.
~I love that you favor texture and comfort in clothes, yet pay attention to looking nice and snappy. I love that you wear lightling's ( ... )

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browascension May 21 2008, 22:42:06 UTC
That is fun, darling listlover!
Inspiration resonation!

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weiskind May 21 2008, 23:00:38 UTC
Ooh, cute peekture! Some day I'll have to mine your files for beauties. Perhaps we can do that together.

Resonance indeed. I'd love to poetize the thing too, but just had time for off-the-cuff.

I love you.

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velellavelella May 22 2008, 00:30:27 UTC
I felt the very mentioning of the things not cared about gave them more importance than things we don't care about should ever be afforded. Whenever anyone tells me they are not thinking about or doing something - instead of what they are thinking about or doing...I have to wonder if they truly aren't thinking about what they've said they aren't...

Phhhwww...That was a mouthful.

So if I were to tell you that I didn't like you because of the car you drive, the clothes you wear, the place you live...aren't I thinking a lot about these things and in the act of doing so - placing a lot of importance on them in both conscious and subconscious levels?

And, then, I agree with browascension on the other points.

I also think that this little poem came from a very loving place, so in that sense - there is nothing wrong with it.

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wonderfroggy May 23 2008, 00:07:44 UTC
I friended you. Just thought I'd let you know. ;)

I love you hoola hooping at sunset on a rooftop all awkward and nerdy...

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reichart May 23 2008, 07:19:30 UTC
Remember the marketing...

You need to write it poorly on a surface that conjures romance...

Like...

- On the sheet on a hospital bed
- In the margin of a book of poetry.
- In the margin of a book on finance.
- On a lunch bag

etc.

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