Story

[brycevan]

I am writing some of my life down, this is a first draft let me know what you think

Comments

[forcemequeen]

Good story but obviously very rough. As you said, needs to be expanded on. Less narrative and more living, perhaps?

[brycevan]

Its a little hard for me to add the living, I was so screwed up that night. I'm just going to keep working on it until it breathes a little better.

[ogo235]

good story!

[brycevan]

Thanks O.G.(I think someones found your gangster name....)
Nice to hear from you.

[sassastonia]

jubel almost peed his pants at the end.
I say choose a voice and a tense.
the story itself is hilarious and worth telling.

[brycevan]

All right but all my Mormon friends have to contribute.

[oblangata]

not a story to read when you are enjoying your breakfast.

[brycevan]

Did I ruin your food? I hope not.
Are you coming A'gaming on Friday?
I'd say that today would be good for weed pulling trade, but I was just outside.....

If you want to hang out anyway, well if you don't see this I'll give you a call.