Some Rise By Sin (Chapter 3)

Feb 24, 2009 06:16

FFN is still down. I'll post this chapter here for you guys and then repost when the site goes back up. Enjoy!

All the Shattered Pieces )

twilight, fanfic

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l8llucyl9l February 24 2009, 17:28:35 UTC
i love love lovedddd this chapter! i'll review in more detail on ffn when it decides to let people sign in again, but i wanted to say thanks for putting it up on here =)
-Lucy

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brynna82 February 24 2009, 21:09:07 UTC
Thanks Lucy! And thanks for the awesome reviews on the previous 2 chapters. I so appreciate it. :)

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pookykums February 24 2009, 18:02:23 UTC
I loved all the different POVs in this chapter :)

And I guess since Bella is a horrible liar, the Cullen family will know of the current situation soon.

This is getting more and more suspenseful (<- I don't even know if that's a word haha) I love it!

I also love the strong bond Jasper & Alice have. The way she still remembers him in her memory despite everything that's happening to her is just amazing.

Can't wait for the next one!

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brynna82 February 24 2009, 21:12:36 UTC
Thanks, pookykums! I'm glad you liked it. :)

And suspenseful is a real word!

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anonymous February 24 2009, 21:10:53 UTC
This chapter was great. Hope FFN sorts it's stuff out soon so you can keep em' coming. :)

By the way, it's cool how the little moments in your stories link together, like how Alice is first seen reading Lewis Carroll in RBTL and we find out that she still has the original copy that Jasper bought her. Very nice touch.

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brynna82 February 24 2009, 21:22:57 UTC
Thanks, mysterious stranger!

I like to link everything together. All four of my stories are linked. It definitely helps me write with more depth if I can carry the history I create from story to story.

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anonymous February 25 2009, 02:08:05 UTC
Hehe. Apoligies for the lack of name. I don't really leave comments a lot (though I really enjoy your stories) so I am not sure how the names work. I am not cyber-savvy it seems.

The links make for a great read and I am a huge fan of the book Alice in Wonderland :P

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rosegilmore February 24 2009, 21:32:14 UTC
That was sooo aweosme!!
All three chapters were really great. But the first is def. my favorite, i loved the emotion in it. And the way that Alice (and the reader) just knew/felt that something bad was going to happen.

Loved the Jasper/Alice scene in her memory!

SRBS has a very different feel than any of the oneshots in RBTL. But their both great! :DD

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brynna82 March 5 2009, 12:25:49 UTC
Thanks! I missed this comment somehow. I'm so glad you are enjoying the story. :)

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