A Little Fic

[bsofthewest]

So, I was late to enter the IStanduary challenge, and I also didn't follow the directions to have a song title in my title, but I offer it to my friends to read. I am trying to get better, so helpful input is always appreciated

Comments

[wickedrent1013]

I thought that was quite beautiful! Full of emotion! Job well done! You should DEFINITELY post this somewhere for general review!!! :)

[bsofthewest]

Thank you my friend. You are my first smile of the day! BS

[kchir]

I loved your 'little fic'

I think it finds the tone well, and I think you captured a bit of KC. Don't be afraid to expand your descriptions, you ARE improving ;)

[bsofthewest]

Many thanks. If there is hope, I am happy. I look for creativity in my life, to break away from the mundane. I will keep trying. BS

[rflc]

I like this. It's short and sweet, with a little bit of angst, but also some promise for the future. I can totally see it continuing if that's a direction you choose.

[bsofthewest]

Well, thank you Ms. R. I don't think I am up to a 2 parter, but I will think on it! I am glad you liked my effort. You give me courage to continue. BS

[orangepeel]

Hi BS!

So, this line I particularly liked:
"The sunlight reflecting off the surfaces seemed dull in comparison to her radiance."

You have some really good descriptions in there BS. I think your writing would benefit from more description surrounding the dialogue, and the expressions intoned into their speech, yknow?

Aside from that, it's a good little fic, im glad you posted it places for others to read :)

[bsofthewest]

Thanks, girl. i am going to work on those things. Step by step. I will improve. I enjoy writing. I guess it comes as a gift to some people. To me, It's a process. BS

[wickedbrdway]

I added you to my friends.
=]

[bsofthewest]

Right back at'cha. Thanks!