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My Immortal; hide/Hyde; PG; yaoi

Aug 05, 2008 08:40

Title: My Immortal
Author: catsmeow2003
Chapter: One-shot
Word Count: 692 *PHAILS*
Prompt: This fic, by art_noveau; your presence still lingers here, And it won't leave me alone (My Immortal, by Evanescence)
Rating: PG? For implied malexmale?
Pairing: hide x Hyde
Warnings: Character death
Genre: angst, RP-based, AU
Synopsis: Memories, even good ones, can be hard to deal ( Read more... )

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Comments 8

duntuchdakei August 5 2008, 15:29:45 UTC

;______________________; that was beautiful.

People say that when the one you love dies, they take a piece of you with them. I disagree with that. You didn’t take a piece of me with you. You took all of me.

I love that part the most

bubblegumtotchi August 5 2008, 19:52:05 UTC

*blushdie and snuggles* Thank you.

I kinda liked that part, too. Not only is it very true, but as Miha pointed out below, Hyde is very much the sort of person that, while he has his reservations and insecurities, once those are breached and he lets himself love and be loved in return, he gives all of himself to it. It just fit him.

scwolf_10k August 5 2008, 15:43:40 UTC

as always, so beautifully written ♥

bubblegumtotchi August 5 2008, 19:52:21 UTC

Thank you. ♥

because I promised a constructive review :P kurosawabride August 5 2008, 16:34:30 UTC

There are times when I feel like nothing more than a spirit, caught in limbo, wandering through an oversized mausoleum, as I go through the daily motions of continuing to live in this once-to-small house, and I consider moving. And then I’ll catch just a hint, barely there anymore, of your scent, in your pillow, on the couch, and I could never leave.

I think this is beautiful. When we lose something, sometimes we just want to escape to a place where there's nothing that reminds us of our loss and at the same time, we're suckers for pain and when we catch just a HINT of that memory, we find ourselves inevitably stuck. This is a very real human situation and you described it very well - the feeling of being in limbo when dealing with a huge loss.

Because, you were right about me being “the girl”, and you were constantly comforting me or trying to drive away my fears and doubts and insecurities. Only now that you’re gone do I realize how very much simply letting you do those things for me helped you in return.I like this part. ( ... )

Re: because I promised a constructive review :P bubblegumtotchi August 5 2008, 21:06:42 UTC

Now to attempt to reply to all of that. :P

When we lose something, sometimes we just want to escape to a place where there's nothing that reminds us of our loss and at the same time, we're suckers for pain and when we catch just a HINT of that memory, we find ourselves inevitably stuck.

That is EXACTLY what I was going for there. And, as we've discussed before, Hyde is very much the sort of person that would get lost in that conflict.

But there are others who like to feel needed and letting them feel needed helps them in their own insecurities.

So very true. I don' think Hyde realizes that, and wouldn't until it... wasn't there anymore. I don't think he'd realize until looking at it in retrospect that, as much as he needed hide and his reassurances and comfort, hide needed to feel needed. Much in the same way OUR relationship works.

The hardest part about losing someone you deeply care about is feeling like you've lost all of yourself especially when you DID give all of your heart to that person. I think that your Hyde ( ... )

kagome_angel August 8 2008, 14:13:43 UTC

I don't know why you said I should ignore this! *wipes at tears* I read Papaya's and it made me cry and this one made me cry to and alskdjfpawoeitjpwoituj0w3896uopijp46y it's too early for this. JUST WAIT TIL I POST THE NEXT AXEL/ROXAS FIC. AND THEN I'LL GET YOU BACK! *shakes fist* XD

No, seriously. Did you doubt the beauty of this? *sniffs* It's heartbreaking too, and damnit, I still wish I could come up with similies and metaphors like you do.

I'm going to try my best to pick out my favorite quotes and not quote the whole thing back at you. *LOL*

and I consider moving. And then I’ll catch just a hint, barely there anymore, of your scent, in your pillow, on the couch, and I could never leave.

;___________________________; HYDE. *CUDDLES HIM*

Only now that you’re gone do I realize how very much simply letting you do those things for me helped you in return.

That line actually hit very close to home for me, so... yeah. *more tears*

People say that when the one you love dies, they take a piece of you with them. I ( ... )

bubblegumtotchi August 8 2008, 14:37:31 UTC

*snugglepets and wipes tears* Well, you know me. I'm never gonna be happy with anything I write. LOL Plus, I rarely write angst at all, so this was a BIG deviation for me, and yeah, I was extremely nervous about it. And I'm sure you'll more than get me back for it. xP ( ... )