Fic | Forget All My Songs About Trains

[bunnothun]

Title: Forget All My Songs About Trains
Author: attilatehbun
Fandom: Young Avengers
Rating: PG
Pairing/Characters: Eli Bradley,Kate Bishop, Tommy Shepherd
Word Count: ~2000
Summary: "Tommy, it's the middle of the night," Eli says, passing a fist over his eyes to clear the sleep away

Comments

[tsaiko]

HAPPY THREESOME YES?

[attilatehbun]

THE SOLUTION TO ALL THINGS!!!!!! why oh why don't i have an ot3 icon this is just sad

[attilatehbun]

;laksdjf ohmygod thank you ♥ That is such a nice thing to say and it really means a lot ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

[jazzypom]

I have SO MANY things to do... but when I see a Kate,Eli, Tommy fic by you, I have to click like a - thing that clicks faster. I like the air of this, Kate's drive (pun), Eli's resoluteness and Tommy's seemingly inability to take things seriously - but then he does. How does he do that?

You have flourishes of lovely language in this, just grand. My only concrit is that 'tada' should be Ta-daa, because it just reads 'tada'- like the name you'd give to the model of Kate's distressed car or something.

[attilatehbun]

Aaah I hope I didn't distract you from anything important! ♥

As for Tommy, yeah, this is definitely supposed to be a look at how all three of them deal with personal upheavals, so of course Tommy's going to act like it doesn't matter (because WHOA, SCARY) until he finally realizes that he has to show that it does. a;sldkfj they are all so bad at feelings

HYYYYYPHEEEEEEEEEEEEEENSSSSSSSSSSSS /doom Hyphens, my nemesis, how you confuse and confound me! One day I will get you. /shakes fist Ha, thanks for pointing that out! Rectified.

[jazzypom]

Erm... damn, LJ ate my comment. tl;dr, I liked the air of this, Kate's drive, Eli's resoluteness, and Tommy's seemingly inability to take stuff seriously, until they do. You write with an Eli pov that I envy like woah.

Oh and 'tada' sounds like the name of Kate's distressed car, it should be 'ta-daa'.

[lilpocketninja]

How, woman, some day I will figure out how.

This is gorgeous. I love how understated the emotions are - there are things happening on several different levels, and so much is unspoken, and you could read it again and again and never quite get all of it together but you can feel it anyway, you know?

a picture of his grandparents, young, smiling, waving at the photographer; a tarnished and dented throwing star, rescued from the floor of a church on fire to change everything; a four year old bus ticket that never had a chance to get used because other things are faster

<333333

[attilatehbun]

OHMYLORD SOMEHOW I NEVER SAW THIS???????? I DON'T EVEN KNOW I'M SORRY :(

Especially because omfg WHAT A BEAUTIFUL COMMENT THANK YOU SO FUCKING MUCH ugh you make me feel so much better than i actually am thank you ♥ ♥ ♥