unravel me- oneshot - uruha x kai

[buriedinheart]

Title: Unravel me
Chapter: Oneshot
Author: buriedinheart
Genre: angst
Warnings: none
Disclaimer: fiction.
Rating: PG
Pairing: Kai X Uruha
Bands: the GazettE
Synopsis:  He feels himself slipping away. Kouyou ignores the mug of steaming black medicine, and Yutaka stays on the couch.
Comments: Inspired by this prompt under cut.  Sorry ive been missing for ages. was

Comments

[alteregosadist]

Ah, I've missed your work! Everything you write is elegant and poetic, but not overly descriptive. The emotions are still sharp and thoughts are clear. Simple, beautiful, but enough to leave behind lingering thoughts and descriptions that haunt you long after the piece is done.

This is a particularly powerful one, because it has phrases that haven't been included before. You took a different approach to a concept that's been done way too many times before, made it more personal, more real. Something yours and only yours. I saw so much of myself in this piece it's scary.

He panics at that very precise moment balancing between sheer terror and helplessness. A threatening black hole that almost engulfs his tiny body.

Terrified because he can’t feel himself. He knows he’s physically there, but it’s a kind of detached knowing, a sort of knowing that is intuitive and of almost basic existence. A physical sense of what it means to be alive. This phrase just sums up the entire concept so accurately. Uruha's self-destruction, his downward

[buriedinheart]

as you know, ive always loved reading your comments and analysis. especially from a fellow writer.

write hard.

[buriedinheart]

<3333 :D ^^

[puss_nd_boots]

This piece is so damn sad, but so very beautiful at the same time. There is definitely a fine line between creative genius and madness, and you can feel how Uruha is slipping over it, and Kai's frustration at being unable to haul him back. I especially like the metaphor of him putting his head on the table like a butcher block, like a man awaiting execution - he knows this whole thing is doomed, that his lover is bound to fall into madness and himself into despair, but he pushes forward anyway.

Very beautiful job on the fic!

[buriedinheart]

thank you for being able to read in between the lines and understanding all the layers of meaning in the metaphors.

[buriedinheart]

thank YOU for bothering to read and type this out even when you're so tired

[sztikerami]

This left me speechless for long minutes, and to be honest, even though I'd like to, I can't say much. It was really intense and incredibly beautiful. Thank you for sharing.

[buriedinheart]

hi i havent written for a long while and was just considering starting again, and this gave me motivation. thank you for taking time to write this comment. :)