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burntcircles

Prison Break Fic: Leap (1/1)

Dec 17, 2009 00:44

Title: Leap (1/1)
Characters: Sara Tancredi, original characters
Rating: PG
Genre: Gen, Non-epilogue compliant (Thanks for coining this term, msgenevieve!)
Length: 1,888 words
Summary: I told him I never talked to her, that she'd kept largely to herself. That she was virtually a stranger to me. I was relaxed but non-committal. Oh, all the little things I ( Read more... )

pb fic

Comments 19

linzi20 December 18 2009, 00:45:07 UTC

Your style of writing is very unique. It's plain, but I mean that in a good way. It doesn't need frills.

This is gorgeous. Welcome back.

*squeezes*

burntcircles December 18 2009, 01:00:35 UTC

Oh, I like 'plain', because this is a male POV and 'plain' should be just about right for this character. Wow, thanks for reading this! *squeezes you back*

eight8toes December 18 2009, 03:25:02 UTC

Yep. You're definitely back!

Very nice story!

burntcircles December 18 2009, 06:06:08 UTC

Thanks, Daph!

melanyebaggins December 18 2009, 06:38:28 UTC

oh wow. That was wonderful, thank you! I love the effortless character development...I could almost hear him narrating in my head. Beautiful glimpse into Sara's life from a very unlikely source!

burntcircles December 18 2009, 08:35:28 UTC

Thank you so much for dropping by, and for the feedback. My aim always with an OC is to make him/her interesting and three-dimensional, so I'm glad to know I've somehow done that. Again, thanks!

mllecalla December 18 2009, 11:17:04 UTC

Oh you're back!! *dances around*~~

I missed your special and beautiful words very very very much. And I need go back to read it again and organize a more coherent and less babbled comment...

Yey!

burntcircles December 18 2009, 23:09:22 UTC

Take your time, can't wait to hear what you have to say! Thanks for reading *g*

rosie_spleen December 18 2009, 11:25:56 UTC

Beautiful, as always Nona. Really gorgeous flow, with your special and significant touches:

Her mouth was hidden behind the scarf she'd wrapped thickly around her neck, but her eyes were smiling, and she greeted Sanjay by name.

So beautifully in character, I could easily imagine this. "Gruyere to a rat' was a gorgeous metaphor as well!

Hope you are enjoying getting back into the creative swing. Many readers would have missed your beautiful words. This is a special welcome back. Thank you!

burntcircles December 18 2009, 23:11:50 UTC

Thanks, Rosie. This did not flow as easily as I would have liked *struggles to shake off rust* but, as they say, baby steps.

So happy to be writing again. Wow, didn't think anybody would want to read this at all! Thanks xx