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The Absence of Chloe - SUBSTITUTION Three (Part 2)

Jun 28, 2008 01:01

Continuation of SUBSTITUTION Three

"An official statement has yet to be released concerning the illegal distribution of PharmaTec products. Charles Kelley, CEO and founder of PharmaTec…"
Chloe sighs heavily, leaning back into her chair, bringing her hands to her face; she rubs the exhaustion from eyes. A pressure's mounting in her head that refuses ( Read more... )

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Comments 9

legendarytobes June 28 2008, 06:09:30 UTC

So much complexity and so much to love about these chapters. Martha-Chloe contrasts so sharply with Martha-Lana. She's so proud and maternal to Chloe and I love that their relationship extends beyond Clark. She calls Lana on her behavior and, until this moment, I never thought about how her actions in Wrath could have cost Kara and Clark and martha so much. Lana's left so many victims in her wake and it's great to see Martha AND Lois call her out on that. Lois should have given her a real hospital bill back in the show and it was marvelously done. I love the big-little sister thing you have going between Lois and Kara and how well they egg each other on. It's been a joy to see develop.

Finally, poor, confused Clark. You go Martha! He does need to grow up.

butifulyletdown June 28 2008, 17:14:58 UTC

Thanks. I always felt that Martha and Chloe would/should of had a deeper relationship on the show. Especially after Jonathan died, with Chloe being the only other person to whom Martha can speak openly with. Also the whole Metropolis girl thing.

I'm glad you enjoyed the update. Thank you for reading and commenting.

simplytoopretty June 28 2008, 16:03:10 UTC

Lots of fantastic stuff in this chapter. I loved maternal Martha and her talk with Chloe. I also really enjoyed the scene between Martha and Lana; Lana does need to be called on her shit and Martha makes her point so eloquently. Her love for Clark really shines through.

The dinner scene was great. Lois and Kara are both excellent, and I loved Clark's outburst about Chloe's laptop. Plus naming the laptop Watson I thought was cute (and I like Watson more than I like Holmes anyways). Clark is like losing it and you showed terrifically.

For the first time he wonders, if he even knows her. That's exactly what I want Clark to be thinking. I want him to think about who Lana really is and realize that maybe she isn't the girl he fell in love with (and even that the girl he fell in love with doesn't exist ( ... )

butifulyletdown June 28 2008, 17:17:12 UTC

Thank. Clark is coming along slowly but surely. It is definitely a growing process.

And I concur Chloe deserves all of the happiness in the world.

I am glad you are still enjoying it. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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butifulyletdown June 28 2008, 17:24:37 UTC

Thanks :D It's funny, when I started the story, it wasn't my intention to torture Clark. It's just the way the story began to unfold. I am so glad your still enjoying it.

Chloe doesn't share the dreams, especially since she's not sleeping.

Now your hope of Substitution ending soon, I can deliver that. There are actually 2 more chappies left in Sub. Sadly the Chlarky part of your request, I can't quite deliver on. But trust me, it won't be to much longer. *grins wickedly* or maybe it will.

Thanks for reading and commenting.

ETA: Love assisting in ship jumping. So we've got a new convert huh? Welcome! Longing Live CHLARK!!! :D

rtm321 June 29 2008, 01:22:36 UTC

Excellent chapter. The dinner was fantastic and I love your characterizations of Lois and Martha especially.

And finally Lana gets called out on her crap. Been waiting to see that for about five years on the show and she just keeps getting worse.

Bravo.

butifulyletdown June 29 2008, 17:31:25 UTC

Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I so love writing Lois. So it was pretty easy to get in her head, Martha wasn't so easy but... *shrugs*

Thanks again.

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butifulyletdown June 29 2008, 21:03:27 UTC

Thanks. I really struggled with maintaining everyone's characterization during dinner.

"How long will Clark be able to contain the beast?"

I guess that's the big problem. He's trying to contain something, that can't be contained. I could say more, but that would ruin the surprise. Let's just say Clark has a choice to make, and either choice will consume him.

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butifulyletdown June 29 2008, 21:35:33 UTC

"I'm going to hate to see this fic end."

Well I guess you'll be happy to know I am planning on a sequel.

"Is the information Chloe kept on her laptop important? I'm just wondering why that was mentioned during dinner."

Nothing really important. Just a private journal of sorts, pictures. That kind of thing. It was mentioned mostly to get a rise out of Clark, and to hint about something else. But you'll see in the third part of this fic what I'm referring to. *snickers*

Thanks for you continued interest in this story. It is so encouraging.