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buttercupgaud

She's back

May 17, 2007 00:18

Title: Oh Bugger
Pairing: Draco/Harry
Author: Buttercup
Contact: Buttercupgaud@aol.com
Rating: PG-13. Mentions of mildish violence.
Warnings: Not really.
Concrit: Bring it.
Disclaimer: I own none of these characters, they belong to J.K Rowling.
Summery: Just a little ficlet. Draco comes over all funny in potions.

( Walk this way )

Comments 15

night_childe25 May 18 2007, 00:07:17 UTC

Thanks, that clears things up a bit. Very nice. ^_^

buttercupgaud May 19 2007, 00:40:37 UTC

Glad to hear it! :-)

pippi_feldspar May 18 2007, 05:12:26 UTC

Firstly, you have a really good, engaging writting style and I was definitely interested from the very beginning. Honestly tho, I found this a little confusing as a whole. How does the ending relate to the beginning? I assume Draco stabbing himself has something to do with realizing he loves Harry but I would appreciate more of a solid connection. I would suggest revising this to explain more clearly why Draco stabbed himself and what kind of spell was placed on him. I assume it was Lucius because you mentioned Draco got the necklace from him, but why would Lucius place a spell like that on Draco? Also, a little more detail on the relationship between Harry and Draco would be really good.

Overall, I think if you do a bit of revising you will have an excellent short fic.

buttercupgaud May 19 2007, 00:40:16 UTC

Thank you for commenting! I've written a second part, which will clear things up a little. I really appricate you taking the time to read and comment.

bonfoi May 18 2007, 07:40:11 UTC

A little editing would catch the odd missing letter or word, but, on the whole, it makes you wonder just how good a "bad guy" Draco can be.

buttercupgaud May 19 2007, 00:38:53 UTC

I think you're right. I'll get a beta reader for the next couple parts. Yeah, I always suspected that he wouldn't make the bad he thinks he would.

nekry May 18 2007, 09:49:47 UTC

I don't think that it was necessary to edit your story. I found it easy to understand and I could follow your path of thinking ( :/ i hope you understand what i want to say ).

Now I got the feeling that this is a hole new story because of the new view on the relationship between Harry and Draco. I like your first version but your second is also great. :)

buttercupgaud May 19 2007, 00:37:37 UTC

Thank you. I really appricate you reading and commenting. I've written a second part. A monster has been created. Thanks again!

andrewrhys May 19 2007, 00:16:12 UTC

Twas awesome. I understood and enjoyed the story in every way! x

buttercupgaud May 19 2007, 00:36:31 UTC

Thanks! I'm really happy that you liked my story. I've updated, so you can now read the second part, if you'd like...