tattoo wording advice please?

[butterflyishida]

I'm going for an appointment for script work on Saturday. It's a song lyric for Jakob that I'm getting done but I'm stuck on the wording I want to go with. One word makes a big difference or maybe i'm analyzing too much

Comments

[lustychan]

I like your version of it better than the original.

[gallac]

man i'd love to help you! but words have never been my strong point......