Comments | calcus: FIC: Superheroes make poor patients and other facts of life, PG

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FIC: Superheroes make poor patients and other facts of life, PG

Oct 01, 2010 19:39

Title: Superheroes make poor patients and other facts of life
Author: calcus
Rating: PG
Pairing: Clark/Ollie, Lois
Word count: c.1500
Summary: Oliver is injured and Clark has to put up with him for the month and a half it takes for him to get better, which is as hard as it sounds. Written for my schmoop_bingo card prompt, ‘nurse back to health’.
Spoilers: For ( Read more... )

character: clark kent/superman, fic: smallville, pairing: clark kent/oliver queen, character: oliver queen/green arrow

Comments 6

chaotic4life October 1 2010, 11:49:10 UTC

Aw ... grumpy Ollie. ♥

calcus October 2 2010, 00:56:40 UTC

Grumpy Ollie is one of my favourite Ollies I think. :)

lizzy384 October 1 2010, 14:06:00 UTC

Hee-hee - excellent title. And ah, yes, it's funny that often people who are normally very fit and healthy, are simply terrible patients when they are sick! So, of course, superheros would be worse ;-)

Despite the fact they ultimately drove each other crazy, it was very clear that the boys were in a comfortable loving relationship - very sweet! And their banter was very amusing. As was Lois - I loved seeing her there in friend mode.

It's been so great to see some Collie stories recently - after a spate of them earlier this year, they seemed to go quiet for a while! So it was lovely seeing an alert for this in my inbox ;-)

A few of mistakes I noticed:
"Oliver’s avatar was run threw" - it should be "through".
"You better be joking mister, or I’m going to finding some of that green stuff" - it should be "I'm going to find".
"brushing their teeth and getting reading for bed" - it should be "getting ready for bed".

calcus October 2 2010, 01:40:06 UTC

Thank you! Superheroes would be HORRIBLE when sick. It makes me think of that Batman and Sons comic where Batman has both his legs broken and is still trying to go out on patrol. "You can't stop me Clark!"

There isn't enough Collie in the world! (Though the name makes me think of a blond, overly cheerful dog that likes to lick people. :P)

Thanks! You can't always spot the mistakes when you read it through yourself! :)

svgurl October 4 2010, 23:56:03 UTC

Aww, this was too cute! The world needs more Collie fic. You totally had both characters nailed. Clark'd totally be overprotective and Oliver would not be a very good patient. Even your Lois voice is spot on. I love how she gives crazy advice, but usually, she's right.

One thing: “It’s fine.” Oliver insisted. For dialogue, you need to use a comma to replace the period, if you're adding a he said/she said type thing after it. I hope that made sense.

The ending was sweet! Yay fluff! I hope you write more Clark/Ollie soon!

Wonderful job! :D

calcus October 6 2010, 22:31:03 UTC

Thank you! Characterisation is tough, particularly in a short fic. :)

Periods and commas after dialogue is one of those things I'm never clear on so thank you!

There is not enough fluff in the world in my opinion. Screw angst. Fluff FTW! There is more Clark/Ollie coming, probably in the same universe. I've got one done and working on another. :)