FIC: A Walk in the Park (part 3)

[calis_1st]

A Walk in the Park
Part 3

Part 1
Part 2

"Agent Burke, come on back," she said. She turned toward a nurse standing near Neal's bed. "Rebecca, can you get Mr. Caffrey some ice chips?"

"Peter, I'm so sorry," Neal said in a raspy whisper. The bed was more upright than it was earlier. Neal gripped the side rails even without the restraints.

"For what?" asked

Comments

[winterstar95]

I liked the characterizations here very much. I also like how you slowly built up to the dart, I couldn't figure it out! So, well done!

[calis_1st]

The internet's a wonderful thing - I had to look at various animal tranquilizer dart/rifle systems for that. And, thanks for your comments!

[kanarek13]

LOVE IT! What a wonderful whumpy story, you have graded the tension perfectly, leaving little clues until the full-blown crisis in the ER. YAY!

Thank you ♥

[calis_1st]

You're most welcome! This was one of the stories floating on my seriously diseased hard drive for almost three weeks. I was really happy it could be recovered. :)

I'm so glad you liked this. I've always had a soft spot for poisonings and there are some especially nasty pesticides out there. Thanks so much for commenting.

[fab50s]

I really enjoyed this story your characterisations were perfect.

[calis_1st]

Thank you so much - I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[angelita26]

This was great! I loved Neal saving Peter and then him ending up being sick! And Jones was awesome as well - I'm so glad he saw that something was wrong with Neal. Thank you for sharing it!

[calis_1st]

I'm very glad you liked this. I do like Jones a lot but I don't always hear him clearly in my head (change meds, I know :D ). Thank you so much for your comments.

[micheleeeex]

I loved this!

[calis_1st]

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it!