i need your opinion
OKAY well since everyone thinks my OC in my harry potter fanfiction is a mary-sue and well heck i have to admit her being an elf is kinda far-fetched, i've decided to rewrite her history. so if you guys wouldn't mind reading it and putting your opinions in the comments?
PLEASE???
okay. well this is kinda long so here goes.
instead of alex being an elf (because everyone seems to hate that idea and i have to admit it is a bit unrealistic) she is a mystic.
i have even planned the history of the mystics and plan to write a proluge (did i spell that write? I'm kinda out of it right now) and well it's the letter Dumbledore writes to Mrs. Weasley explaining the history of Alex's people and i'll have a link to that in my story.
so here's a brief background
mystics are human. They can do SOME wandless magic, just like wizards, when they have have heightened emotions (again sorry i may spell things wrong so bear with me) however they do have a bit more magical ability than wizards do. The only other big ability they have is they can heal people. That is their big appeal.
Now there are only a few mystics. They are a very small group. Well during the war, they were of course asked by both sides to join them. They of course wanted to stick together. Well Voldemort promised to keep them safe and just asked to heal his people. the OoTP was asking a bit more so they sided with voldemort (of course not knowing he was the bad side). Well Alex's parents Elizabeth and Nigel were part of that group. (alex was about a few months old or so) and well they were kept at headquarts and kinda locked away so that none of them would know what voldemort was doing. and of course all of them were fitted with the dark mark and made 'death eaters' of course they didn't know what that meant. Well one mystic found out everything and they started to get suspicious and well voldemort exterminated them. well alex's mom hid her in a drawer (with the back cut out so she could breathe) and the whole place was trashed (except the dresser) and well guess who found alex crying? yep it was snape who was undercover and so he went to the first member house he could think of, remus lupin and then informed dumbledore. snape of course knew all of the mystics so he knew it was alex. he had been fond of alex as well.
well alex was home schooled and kept at lupin's because dumbledore was afraid that one of the death eater's might find out that one of the mystics was still alive. and during the year that remus taught school, she went and lived with mad eye moony.
now somehow lucius malfoy (by barty crouch of course) found out about alex and of course told voldemort. so alex was found and took to the malfoys and captured. well when the order was est. again looked for her and then of course found her and took her to grimmuald.
im taking out the evaporing thing and stuff. she's going to to a bit more helpless than she previously was. she's not hermione's cousin either,im going to take that out. or lupin's goddaughter. he was just her legal guardian.
so i hope that sounds better.
PLEASE???
okay. well this is kinda long so here goes.
instead of alex being an elf (because everyone seems to hate that idea and i have to admit it is a bit unrealistic) she is a mystic.
i have even planned the history of the mystics and plan to write a proluge (did i spell that write? I'm kinda out of it right now) and well it's the letter Dumbledore writes to Mrs. Weasley explaining the history of Alex's people and i'll have a link to that in my story.
so here's a brief background
mystics are human. They can do SOME wandless magic, just like wizards, when they have have heightened emotions (again sorry i may spell things wrong so bear with me) however they do have a bit more magical ability than wizards do. The only other big ability they have is they can heal people. That is their big appeal.
Now there are only a few mystics. They are a very small group. Well during the war, they were of course asked by both sides to join them. They of course wanted to stick together. Well Voldemort promised to keep them safe and just asked to heal his people. the OoTP was asking a bit more so they sided with voldemort (of course not knowing he was the bad side). Well Alex's parents Elizabeth and Nigel were part of that group. (alex was about a few months old or so) and well they were kept at headquarts and kinda locked away so that none of them would know what voldemort was doing. and of course all of them were fitted with the dark mark and made 'death eaters' of course they didn't know what that meant. Well one mystic found out everything and they started to get suspicious and well voldemort exterminated them. well alex's mom hid her in a drawer (with the back cut out so she could breathe) and the whole place was trashed (except the dresser) and well guess who found alex crying? yep it was snape who was undercover and so he went to the first member house he could think of, remus lupin and then informed dumbledore. snape of course knew all of the mystics so he knew it was alex. he had been fond of alex as well.
well alex was home schooled and kept at lupin's because dumbledore was afraid that one of the death eater's might find out that one of the mystics was still alive. and during the year that remus taught school, she went and lived with mad eye moony.
now somehow lucius malfoy (by barty crouch of course) found out about alex and of course told voldemort. so alex was found and took to the malfoys and captured. well when the order was est. again looked for her and then of course found her and took her to grimmuald.
im taking out the evaporing thing and stuff. she's going to to a bit more helpless than she previously was. she's not hermione's cousin either,im going to take that out. or lupin's goddaughter. he was just her legal guardian.
so i hope that sounds better.