Drunk talk
Title: Drunk talk
Author: Camouflagecat
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: G-Ri
Word Count: 728
Genre: angst, smut-ish
Disclaimer: I don't own the persons, just the story.
Summary: Seungri thinks Jiyong is so troublesome when he's drunk.
A/N Another GRi drabble. I really can't decide which pairing I like the most to write about, so I kinda switch between all of them. ( Read more... )
Author: Camouflagecat
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: G-Ri
Word Count: 728
Genre: angst, smut-ish
Disclaimer: I don't own the persons, just the story.
Summary: Seungri thinks Jiyong is so troublesome when he's drunk.
A/N Another GRi drabble. I really can't decide which pairing I like the most to write about, so I kinda switch between all of them. ( Read more... )
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please don't take this as criticism (it's not, exactly) because i wouldn't bother to say it if i didn't like this but a beta reader would really help you out. tighten up yr writing, yeah?
example: "Jiyong brings his hand to Seungri’s face to caress his chin and then he grabs his jaw to turn his head towards him. He looks at him intently as if he’s inspecting something. he, he, he, his, woah confusing. there are plenty of descriptives or alternate sentence construction to avoid this. obv things like this aren't a big deal individually but if you want to clean it up a beta's prob a good idea.
either way- post more!
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I have a beta reader for my longer fics, I just tend to be a bit lazy in beta reading when writing these short drabbles >__<
I know what you mean, I'll correct it and think about it next time :)
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I was drunk lastnight lnfao
I don't even remember my words
I'm troublesome to GD it's all good lmfao
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welcome
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Thanks ^^
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