Not the OP but...
anonymous
August 5 2009, 23:53:35 UTC
...I loved this! I was tracking this thread and I'm so glad someone took on this prompt!
His mind was so focused on the images that Jim was passing into him (the slap of skin on skin, body fluids shared between them, fingers grasping and nails scratching, pushing into tightness that seemed almost impossible, grunting into a motion of rhythm until two bodies were one and could not be separated)
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His mind was so focused on the images that Jim was passing into him (the slap of skin on skin, body fluids shared between them, fingers grasping and nails scratching, pushing into tightness that seemed almost impossible, grunting into a motion of rhythm until two bodies were one and could not be separated)
GUH
Very hot and well-written!
<3
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A few minor things, only because you're a good enough writer to make them worthwhile:
you mean taut, not taught (the former=tight, the latter=past tense of to teach)
you mean past, not passed (the former=direction, the latter=past tense of to pass)
Again, totally yummy fic--thank you so much for posting!
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