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caoine

Supernatural: Long Strange Trip

May 24, 2006 05:49

Title: Long Strange Trip
Author: caoine
Rating: G
Count: ~937 words
Notes: Totally gen!fic. Also? Why do I always get bunnies RIGHT before bed? As usual, all disclaimers apply. Not mine, I'm poor, don't sue.

( John loves the road, and he hates it. )

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Comments 11

snow_white May 24 2006, 10:07:26 UTC

*applauds and throws chocolate*I really, really liked this...nice to delve into what makes 'em tick without using smut!*g*not that there's anything wrong with that...hope we see more from you soon!Well done!

caoine May 24 2006, 19:52:55 UTC

*giggle*

There's absolutely nothing wrong with smut! :D I'm glad you liked it.

phantomas May 24 2006, 10:49:47 UTC

I really like your story. The structure of it, and the different povs, each one an insight. Thanks :)

caoine May 24 2006, 19:55:20 UTC

:D

Thank you!

impertinence May 24 2006, 11:17:25 UTC

This is really wonderful to read. I love the repetition and the way you explore each of the characters through the same theme--and I loved Sam's part. I'm not sure whether you meant to repeat the phrase "poor souls in Suburbia", but it works really well. Awesome job.

caoine May 24 2006, 19:56:12 UTC

Thank you!

I'm such a dork, sometimes I get more wrapped up in format than in whatever it is I'm trying to say. I'm just glad it worked this time.

katbcoll May 24 2006, 16:52:32 UTC

Nice work! I really liked how you put this together.

caoine May 24 2006, 19:56:33 UTC

Thanks!

iamstealthyone May 24 2006, 22:39:44 UTC

This was a nice read. I liked all the different POVs you used here. Nicely executed concept.

Favorite parts:

>> Because he can't wait. Can't wait for for things to come to him. Can't wait to finish it all. Because he has to do something to kill the ache inside of him. Because it's a purpose and a reason and because he suspects the ache won't die until he does.

That's just a gorgeous paragraph. You can soooo feel John's pain there.

>> Because everything is different every day and it's all familiar.

I like that a lot. Nice turn of phrase.

>> The road doesn't care.

>> It's seen every tragedy, every joy. It reaches into the heart of every mountain. Every valley. Every person.

>> The road just keeps on going.

I like how you ended it with the road's POV, showing that no matter how any of the Winchesters feel about things, the road is infinite and indifferent.

Nice.

caoine May 25 2006, 00:49:17 UTC

I'm really glad you liked it. :D Thanks for reading!