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Story: In a Different Light by marinarusalka

Jul 07, 2009 14:35

Title: In a Different Light
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Author: marinarusalka
Rating: R
Word count: aprox. 20,700
Canon: movieverse/616 mashup; set about a year and a half after the Iron Man movie, with the assumption that the classic Avengers team was formed a few months after Tony's "I am Iron Man" press conference ( Read more... )

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Comments 18

posyvanilla July 8 2009, 14:14:50 UTC

Such a great story! I really love Tony's voice here; there's just the right amount of snark and self-consciousness. The buildup of attraction in Steve's voice, too, is wonderful--I love how we can see his feelings for Tony growing deeper and deeper, even as he's sort of struggling with them. The rushed kiss and the payoff at the end made me let out a happy sigh.

It's obvious that you put a lot of work into the medical research; everything reads so cleanly. You did a wonderful job of describing what it feels like to be on medication like Diamox--that slow, stupid, sleepy feeling. Bravo to you for treating this so well.

Also, giant scorpions? Win! :)

marinarusalka July 9 2009, 13:15:04 UTC

Thank you! I'm very glad you liked it. I'm especially glad the medical research bits worked, because it's often such a fine line between "realism" and "boring infodump."

amonitrate July 9 2009, 02:37:48 UTC

Great story, good job with the movieverse mashup. Everyone felt very in character.

marinarusalka July 9 2009, 13:23:02 UTC

Thank you! Combining the movie and comics canon was a fun challenge. I'm glad you enjoyed the end results. :-)

m_steelgrave July 9 2009, 03:14:51 UTC

This was wonderful. I love that your Tony was frustrated and unsure without becoming too angsty. And you have the cadence of RDJ's speech in the movie down pat. And Steve! Mother henning out of practicality at first, and figuring out other reasons for it later. Very nice.

Nice work incorporating all the research, too. Just enough detail that it was clear you knew what you were talking about.

Great job!

marinarusalka July 9 2009, 13:24:41 UTC

Thanks! RDJ's dialogue in the movie is very distinctive, so it was an interesting exercise trying to write it. (And I had to rewatch the movie about a hundred times, such a hardship. :-D) I'm glad you enjoyed the story!

poilass July 9 2009, 16:58:34 UTC

I really enjoyed this! The voices are dead on, and the pacing is great. Tony was awesome, of-course, (and usually my favourite) but I especially liked how Steve basically refused to get all angsty or hide his feelings forever, etc. Sensibleness is so sexy! Such a lovely long story really deserves better feedback, but I'm out now ;}.

marinarusalka July 9 2009, 21:02:50 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. And I totally agree that sensibleness is sexy, which is one of the (many) reasons I love Steve.

1 simmysim July 12 2009, 19:24:31 UTC

Oh, what an utterly perfect mashup, I love how you balanced the elements of both worlds, you can clearly see the influence of both sets of canon and you've gotten them to play together really well. I've got a soft spot for a more 616!Steve dealing with movie!Tony, and this really fed into it. I liked Hill being included, too.

I read in the comments above that you were worried about a boring infodump, but oh man that was really, it never crossed my mind, it was interesting and well worded. A perfect amount of realism, def enhancing my blind kink. Also, everyone dealt with the situation very realistically, I think, Steve's almost tentative hovering, Tony's discomfort, their frustration with each other, and then their growing attraction, all read true to the characters.

SPEAKING OF my blind kink, wah, I adore the premise, and I adore how you handled it. There's a great vulnerability here, but it's still 100% Tony, and there's an extra level of . . deliciousness in it, that it's movie Tony that it's happening to. SPEAKING OF, you' ( ... )

2 simmysim July 12 2009, 19:24:55 UTC

Some details that I really liked: Did you know Stark Industries was one of the first major companies to have an anti-harassment policy?" Tony raised one shaky hand and rubbed his forehead just above the glasses, as if trying to hold back a headache. "It was my mother's one big contribution to the business. She was... it was important to her."

and "I'm acting," Steve said with what he thought was pretty admirable restraint, "like your friend. It's a funny habit I have."

This made me lol "AVENGER ACID ATTACK!" screamed the Post, sending Hank on a tirade about sloppy journalists who couldn't be bothered to tell an acid from a base.

"I think they just wanted the alliteration," Jan said.

Hank looked deeply offended. "That's no excuse. They could've said alkali. lol I'm sure hank.

And this, yes, this scene here is exactly why I have a blind kink, god, I LOVE how you wrote this:
As an exit line, this clearly called for a determined march out of the room. Unfortunately, all Tony could manage was a cautious shuffle. There was a ( ... )

Re: 2 marinarusalka July 13 2009, 01:24:01 UTC

Aww, thank you so much for the gorgeous feedback! I feel all happy and glowy now. :-)

I'm so glad that the combination of the two universes worked for you, that's something I focused a lot on while I was writing the story. I came into the fandom via the movie, and RDJ's Tony is my first love, but then I totally grew to love the comics, especially the original Avengers. And I just adore 616 Steve. So I've been wanting to bring them together for a while, and bigbang provided the perfect excuse. :-)