Sue #8

[captainjulieif]

TITLE: Something Called Love
PERPETRATOR: Bratney
FANDOM: Harry Potter
SUMMARY: Harry just found out he has a sister. What will he do when Draco catches her eye? And she catches Draco's? DracoOC Sorry I suck at summaries.
RATED: K+, PG
STATUS: Complete

NAME: Magenta Black
SPECIES: Witch
HAIR: "long-brown pigtails"
EYES: "a beautiful black, almost the

Comments

[soconfused_15]

You wrote these? K. Here's some of my opinions. Your writing is flat, average, not that great. End of story. Its overly descriptive (in points) and sounds like a 14 year old girl wrote it. sorry, but thats the truth.

[captainjulieif]

The the entire point of my journal is to point out stories that are MarySues, badly written or with purple proses, and in general just bad fanfics. I did not write them, I would do many a horrible act before I would claim to writing these atrocities. If you read the entire thing, you will see a link to the author profiles.

Please, next time, read my entire journal entries and the sidebar about the journal. The entire purpose of my journal is to spork and mock Sue Stories.

Before you give a harsh bit of constructive criticism, make sure to try to do it to someone who actually wrote the fic. ;)

Otherwise, thanks for the comment!

<3 IF