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caraaazy

Two Way Street

Mar 16, 2010 02:26

Two Way Street
Chapter 3- The Arrival
Callie/Arizona
PG-13
Standard Disclaimer: Don't own, Don't profit

The are two sides to every story. This story just happens to be about a first date.

A/N- unbetad, all spelling/grammar goofs are my own

( Chapter 3- The Arrival )

Comments 15

addictt24 March 16 2010, 10:39:49 UTC

This was really really awesome so far :D I loved the style. Maybe reading it twice over is a little redundant, maybe you could the stories lapse just a little but not entirely - just like you did in part 1, I liked that :)

I'm hoping you will continue this, it was an awesome read!

jesross March 16 2010, 10:53:20 UTC

i.love.this. i guess i can see why you would be hesitant about the redundancy, but honestly, it didn't bother me in the slightest. it didn't feel boring at all - i actually thought it was really fun and super cute to get both points of view on the same scene. whether or not you decide to change up the style, please continue, because this is way too adorable to abandon.

starshine_blue March 16 2010, 10:59:28 UTC

I am loving this fic. They are both perfectly adorable and you captured the characters really well.

Maybe if you're worried about it being redundant you can stagger the time slightly between each account. So that only the end of Callie's memory and the beginning of Arizona's overlap? I do really like reading their different opinions on the event though.

Keep it up!

soricha March 16 2010, 11:36:21 UTC

I agree

ifabi March 16 2010, 17:28:54 UTC

I second (third?) this.

Ps: I smiled the whole time since the mention of Az's car ,that's a dreamy car with a dreamy driver right there :)

stargazer89 March 16 2010, 12:12:44 UTC

it's not redundant! I loved all the little things like Callie hearing Arizona's "it's just too easy" and then reading Arizona's POV saying she said it too quiet for Callie to hear XD plleeease continue, I really enjoyed those first 3 chapters =D

coliebearz March 16 2010, 13:26:04 UTC

I really love this. I've been really hoping someone would write some more stories of when they first got together so I was so excited to read this, and you did a great job! I didn't find it redundant, but I'd agree that the way you did it in the first chapter might eliminate some of that. Please continue!