california nights (minseok/luhan)

[seafogs]

title: california nights
pairing: broken!minseok/luhan
rating: pg
warnings: implied drug use, sans beta
summary: luhan leaves and minseok thinks he can run after him, wherever he is.

Comments

[yunsias]

;________________________; I DON'T EVEN LIKE XIUHAN BUT LOOK WHAT AT THE TEARS I SHED FOR THEM HERE.

I love the way you ended this and how it links back to "The radio’s left unused from the lack of a decent signal in the area. All Minseok can think of however, is the sound of Luhan’s voice. It rings in his ears almost too distinctively, begging to be noticed.". For me, Minseok's pain of having Luhan walk out of his life is encapsulated in the last sentence because on the outside, nothing has changed, Minseok is still Minseok and the world continues to turn but on the inside, he has to bear the memories and the pain.

He's static, like "The radio’s left unused from the lack of a decent signal" eue I love all the little similarities between the barren landscape of the desert to his inner emotional state.

I actually like your short fics more, especially when they're written in short bursts of inspiration and intense feelings. Please word-vomit more, I've missed them.

[seafogs]

i swear i should totally compile all your comments and just stick them on my bedroom wall ;;; your comments are super adorable and in-depth (also you notice parallelisms that i often overlook unintentionally), and i really love it!!

this is why i love you so much cleo ;;; i should definitely write more of these soon when i have the time! ♡

[yunsias]

or i can just write you handwritten fan letters because i'm a total fan of you ♡

i forgot to mention this though: "he doubts the other might not be able to give him a definite answer, either" should the "not" be there? because the sentence consists of double negatives so you're saying that luhan can give a definite answer? /confused

[seafogs]

PLEASE omg that'd be super cute ;;;;

edited!!! see i told you i overlook these things