Please help!!!

[carcar32088]

Hi everyone! So 5 of my applications are already sitting in front of admissions officers, but I have yet to even finish my Brown app. The only thing I have left are my 2 PLME essays, which are for Brown's undergrad-med school combo program. They need to be mailed by December 12, so I was wondering if you could like read them and give me a little

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[anonymous]

Hey Carl, i'm going to post one for each essay so i don't get confused. ps, i'm sorry if i'm brutal, i am a brutal editer i guess ;) alright my first thing would be to i would add in a '; however,' at the end of the first sentence after lives and before i made my decision. my reasoning is that the first couple of sentences

[acn87]

Hey Carla!
Overall I like the second one better, because you take a little bit of a bold risk with it. However, I think you need to expand it a little at the end and make it more personal to why you want to become a doctor - why all those fears and doubts you have about them don't crush your dream or whatever.

The first one seems a little too typical..

Just my opinion... both are awesome essays and they are written really well! :) Hope it helps

-Andrew

[mce1429]

i totally agree with andrew
on both points

the second essay is the better one, i do believe

[carcar32088]

Thanks.

Except they are both required essays. Cuz Brown is retarded and actually needs like 7.

Blah.

[nosilla812]

Hi Carla! It's allison. Make sure you change I've to "I have" and stuff because colleges don't like contractions. But they were really good essays!!
ttyl!