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Death Note drabble (31_days): Ultrasonic

Oct 01, 2005 00:42

This is not meant to be a sequel to my previous drabble, Irony in its Entirety. Think of this more as a different side of viewing the situation; a "what if".

Title: Ultrasonic
Series: Death Note
Theme: Oct. 01 - A screaming comes across the sky
Warning(s): Spoiler for volume 7+
Word Count: 100

This drabble was written for 31_days and was revised as ( Read more... )

death note, my fanfics, 31_days

Comments 6

dark_waterlily October 3 2005, 14:03:01 UTC

Awesome!!! I think this should have happened... you captured the alternate ending of chaps 58-59 great job!

card_mistress October 3 2005, 23:22:18 UTC

L is gone for good... L really does grow on you, I guess Near and Mello are just not enough.

And as I go to read the latest chapter, I get a whole different feel from when it was still early in the series. But now, I think Death Note is finally coming to its climax; it'll be a matter of time before Light goes down...

Thanks for commenting by the way~! :D
Yeah, I sometimes still imagine L being alive...

fiendery October 4 2005, 03:46:04 UTC

I think the only thing that confused me was the point-of-view. Because it's in third person and has two male characters, I got a bit lost as to who was doing what.

But it was still AWESOME because L SHOULD HAVE LIVED. Oh, woe!

I rather like the last line. It never crossed my mind that he might not have had a name anyway. And seeing as he goes by so many names from the start...

card_mistress October 4 2005, 04:31:00 UTC

Yeah, I was afraid that would happen x_x And I didn't want to use Light's name, so I substituted it with 'he'... But then there were sentences with only 'his' and you couldn't really tell if 'his' referred to Light or L.

It's actually in third-person limited; everything is seen through Light's eyes, just written in a third-person perspective. Maybe I should have made it first-person, hmmm...

Well, as fans, we can only imagine and write AU fanfics to make up for the lost...

Thanks for the comment! I really appreciate anything that can potentially improve my writing style :)

ebonymystress October 11 2005, 02:04:23 UTC

This was really good, an interesting ending which I do believe would have been better than the one provided for us...I'm still holding onto some faint shred of hope that he will come back turning out to not really be dead and it was all an elaborate hoax or something, even though I have heard them say that he definately will not come back...oh well I guess that is why we have fan fics and doujins for huh? ^_^ Anyway I really love the style of this and yeah the last line was a really good way to end the story.

card_mistress October 11 2005, 13:08:18 UTC

Thank you! :3

Haha, and aren't we all? *crosses finger for L to suddenly rise from the dead*
I would even settle with a zombie L x_x (not that he doesn't act like one already)

As usual, this drabble was also built around that one line, although it really was only 100 words, I needed something which made an impact and those 10 short seconds of reading worthwhile.