I'm not sure if it was intentional, the way your haikus started blending together in the middle there, but it certainly made them very interesting. Like the comparison of the ant missing a leg walking along the floor, to the haiku of your sister Annie, my aunt, who happened to also be missing one leg in the end. Also, talknig about the people you love who are gone juxtaposed against the image of your children safe and living their lives.
On the other hand, the comparison of your neighbor spying a bmoose to Stephanie being pregnant... not so good. Same for the tennis bracelet combined with the image of dead fish and sea salt.
Love you Mom! You are coming for Thanksgiving, right? No babies being born that time this year that we know of!
I was trying to put the poems side by side to save --- i don't know what. It is interesting, eh? I like the part about being so pleased about her seeing the moose.
ah well. yes. Thanksgiving is good. May we stay with you? or ought we to ask Bobbie?
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On the other hand, the comparison of your neighbor spying a bmoose to Stephanie being pregnant... not so good. Same for the tennis bracelet combined with the image of dead fish and sea salt.
Love you Mom! You are coming for Thanksgiving, right? No babies being born that time this year that we know of!
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ah well. yes. Thanksgiving is good. May we stay with you? or ought we to ask Bobbie?
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