It's... "Liv!lovely" as I said. Not that I'm making any sense.
Just one thing...
The man that Silhouette had scene had gotten his face... Did you mean "seen?"
Other than that, I really enjoyed it. Obviously I'm only just getting a sense of characters, plot and setting right now but it's clearly developing well. Have you written any more yet? I'd really like to see the end result/it further developed.
OKAY OKAY I was TOTALLY writing Marlene wayyyy before Stuck. :P (Both Marlene's are totally awful though, funny how that happened.)
And yes, I did! What a weird mistake~
There's a bit more that I wrote first here which takes place towards the end, chronologically, if you are really curious. :]
Thanks so much!
And, question, the last two sections about Marlene and the man with the black hat didn't seem too vague, did they? I'm considering rewriting them to be less metaphorical .
I always interchange no and know. It's often just an aftereffect of tiredness, tbh.
Ooooh. I do wanna read it but I'm absolutely bloody shattered so I think it's best I sleep and read it in the morning/early afternoon of tomorrow.
Personally, I liked them. I think as the characters and plots are developed it will become clearer. Though, you may want to clarify the whole colour blind - grey - blue sky thing. It's probably just because I'm tired but when reading I wasn't sure if she felt the blue sky were +ive or -ive, though I think the latter, most probably.
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It's... "Liv!lovely" as I said. Not that I'm making any sense.
Just one thing...
The man that Silhouette had scene had gotten his face... Did you mean "seen?"
Other than that, I really enjoyed it. Obviously I'm only just getting a sense of characters, plot and setting right now but it's clearly developing well. Have you written any more yet? I'd really like to see the end result/it further developed.
Keep going, your writing is fantastic. <3
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And yes, I did! What a weird mistake~
There's a bit more that I wrote first here which takes place towards the end, chronologically, if you are really curious. :]
Thanks so much!
And, question, the last two sections about Marlene and the man with the black hat didn't seem too vague, did they? I'm considering rewriting them to be less metaphorical .
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I always interchange no and know. It's often just an aftereffect of tiredness, tbh.
Ooooh. I do wanna read it but I'm absolutely bloody shattered so I think it's best I sleep and read it in the morning/early afternoon of tomorrow.
Personally, I liked them. I think as the characters and plots are developed it will become clearer. Though, you may want to clarify the whole colour blind - grey - blue sky thing. It's probably just because I'm tired but when reading I wasn't sure if she felt the blue sky were +ive or -ive, though I think the latter, most probably.
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Thanks, good idea!
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