traces, part five.

[casi_casi]

Title: Traces
Part: 5 of 10
Characters: David Beckham, Martín Cáceres, Fabio Cannavaro, Iker Casillas, Royston Drenthe, Julien Faubert, Fernando Gago, Raúl González, Pep Guardiola, Thierry Henry, Guti Hernández, Xavi Hernández, Gonzalo Higuaín, Andrés Iniesta, Bojan Krkić, Lionel Messi, Ruud van Nistelrooy, Gerard Piqué, Carles Puyol, Sergio Ramos

Comments

[tonstant_weader]

*shriek* An update! I'm embarrassingly glad to see this had been updated and pleasantly surprised to see that I remembered where things had left off really vividly. I shouldn't be surprised - your section endings are so memorable and even now there's a clarity of characters that allows this large cast to not become muddled

[casi_casi]

Oh, your comment made me smile. Thank you so much. As I must have said countless times before, this type of feedback is so useful when writing this kind of fic. It gives me things to look out for in the following chapters (to make sure I'm dealing with questions that readers want answered) and gives me an idea of what I could do better. I'm very grateful to you for that.

I find it very interesting that you were unsurprised that Thierry had two guns. ;)

Thanks for continuing to read this and to leave comments. It means a lot. ♥

[tonstant_weader]

Oh I'm sure I would've written more, but it was late, LOL. There's so much detail in this story and due to the nature of the plot I wonder if it's some sort of clue. :P

Thierry as a character to me seems the most calculating. I wouldn't say sinister specifically, but after last chapter I see him as needing to control situations - prevent harm from coming to him and use opportunities for personal gain. It's why I wasn't surprised there was a second gun, although I don't pretend to know his current motivations for removing it.

I'm looking forward to continuing to read and comment! :D

[casi_casi]

I don't pretend to know his current motivations for removing it
Has he removed it? ;)

♥

[eileenyx]

Oh, man. I'm discombobulated in the best way. Please keep in mind that this is really TL;DR.

There's so much going on in the exchange between Raúl and Messi. Messi seems to be this motiveless reservoir of information who happens to feel no sense of loyalty or feelings of protection towards the Union, so it's tempting to believe most of what he's saying. However, even Messi says, "Everybody here in insincere." And I remember how he and Drenthe agree to cooperate with the cops while withholding certain secrets as well.

I love how Raúl's straightforwardness and focus on Messi seems to give him momentary tunnel vision with regards to Puyi and the other four men. I love how Messi's throwaway line of Puyi and the others being cheapskates is basically a prompt that Raúl dismisses. Then again, as we've seen before, Raúl makes sharp observations without seeming to do so.

"People who keep the rich rich and the poor on the streets. People who are the best at what they do because nobody else is allowed to do it. Darwin would have a field day

[casi_casi]

Thank you so much, for reading this and leaving a comment and just being wonderful. ♥

Gah, I love how you pick up so many little details. I can't even begin to explain how great it is to read your "long rambles". All the questions you've asked give me pointers for the rest of the chapters - give me things to look out for, questions I need to make sure I answer by the end (or answer more obviously, ha). The only question I'll answer is the one about Mamen - no, it's not her. :)

I think it can be tough to make each character interesting in his own right when you've got so many of them, so I'm really glad to hear how much you're enjoying the ones I've written.

Thank you endlessly, again.

[casi_casi]

Oh, but it's I who needs to thank you! It sounds hyperbolic but it means so, so much to know that you're still reading this and enjoying it. Five chapters in, it's great to know that you're not losing interest. :)

the fucked up guys are the most interesting ones
I totally agree with you there. Who wants to watch a movie or read about people who are entirely normal?

I'm really glad that you're finding people like Guti and Sergio and Rubén and Lionel interesting. Well, I'm happy to hear that any of the characters is interesting, really, since most of them will end up being quite important in one way or another.

Confusion is good! I'd be distraught if people already knew who'd done it. ;)

Thank you again. I appreciate your feedback so much. ♥

[kitty69lover]

*shrieks*

i am speechless. i am staring in awe. i am flailing. i need more time to come up with any sort of decent comment, but i'll return before the end of the week!

[casi_casi]

Ahh, you make me smile! Thank you, lovely. ♥

[kitty69lover]

i'm glad i made you smile. and i'm sorry i didn't make it during the weekend like i said, but my home internet got screwed and those bitches couldn't fix it since 4 o clock in the afternoon on Saturday. [imagine the dramalama lol]

the Bojan-Thierry part got me humming, i swear you have a magical touch to make me not only accept this pairing, but to love them [i'm a Titi hater...and a Bojan worshiper]. the dynamics are so rich and seem so natural. i'm not sure Bojan realises he's just a pawn [maybe i'm wrong here] that Titi doesn't 'need' him, not as much as Bojan needs the older man.

Sergio listening to Fernando's message kinda broke my heart and i don't even like either of them. Sergio's reaction he's told someone though, kinda makes me believe his despair is not just a lover's

[casi_casi]

Oh, you absolutely have no need to apologise at all. Quite the opposite. Sorry to hear about your internet drama; I think I'd collapse if my internet was broken. Your comment did make me laugh, in the best possible way!

Thank you so, so much for everything you said. It's so lovely and quite intriguing to read all of your thoughts. And thoroughly amusing to hear about which people you don't like, haha. Thank you for your compliments and for all the feedback in general. It's more encouraging than I can say, and gives me a new sort of enthusiasm to write later chapters.

Hahaha, Miguel Torres. I could never really crush on him, because I always found him to look too much like Ricky Martin. :|

Rubén is not in a wheelchair, no. :)

Thank you so much again. This feels like such a paltry thanks to a comment into which you put far more effort than a lot of people do. I really, really appreciate the feedback. ♥

[txorakeriak]

*SNIFFLE* Iker/David isn't really my number one Iker OTP but DUDE, they do get to me. Especially when they're breaking up, and the way Becks breaks up with Iker here is just so Becks, and... *sniffles some more

[casi_casi]

Ahhhhhh! I just got a whole pile of comments from you. I can't believe you went back and read all of the fics I've posted. You're amazing. Thank you so much. ♥

I'm so glad you're enjoying this! And it probably sounds like empty words, but it really does give me so much joy to know that you're liking this! I really hope you end up happy with how it all turns out, I want it to be perfect for you.

Your comment made me smile so much. I'm not going to answer any of your questions, but they're good questions to ask! And thank you again - feedback like this (with questions!) keeps me on my toes. Thanks to everybody's comments, I have things I need to look out for and, well, questions I need to make sure I answer! Your feedback has always been priceless, ever since the first fic I posted, and that hasn't changed a bit. C:

PS What's your number one Iker OTP? I can't believe I don't know this. (I do remember the great Empanada fic you wrote once, though, with Cesc/Iker...?)