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casi_casi

lovelines.

Jan 17, 2011 23:18

Title: Lovelines
Pairing: David Beckham / Iker Casillas
Rating: R
Disclaimer: Lies.
Notes: There may be some factual inaccuracies lurking in this story to annoy adherents to uncompromising realism. My sincere apologies if you're one of them.
Feedback > life. Constructive criticism is always welcome.

( i believe in memories; they look so, so pretty when i sleep )

fic, david beckham, iker casillas

Comments 21

sunkissedln89 January 18 2011, 23:29:32 UTC

omg this is just... perfect. i don't even know what to say. ah my heart! i'm in love with this & just want to read it over & over.

"So you think it's the 'end'?" David's voice was soft with an inexplicable hurt. "Because my body's not here, you'd just rather - let me go, and move on, and - and not be here when I get back?"

"Well -" Iker hesitated. "What else did you expect?"
this part made me tear up. so heartbreaking for both of them. ahh i suck at leaving comments but yeah this is my new favorite fic. *bookmarks*

casi_casi January 21 2011, 06:10:10 UTC

Oh, thank you so much! That's really the most wonderful thing to hear. I'm so glad you liked this. ♥

sumrndmgrl January 19 2011, 04:53:45 UTC

Don't know why but thought "his Spanish still on the bad side of rusty" was such a cute phrase!

I like the way you characterized Iker's borderline bratty ways in the morning haha I think his "leave it alone unless I'm ready to talk about it" approach you gave him is something that can be attributed to Iker as well. Even though Iker expressed how pointless it felt, he still was willing to go to the cafe with David, aw!

David asking "what's the point" when at the airport made me think to earlier back in the story :( Sad

I like how well organized the time flashes were and that I didn't get lost or confused in it. Showing their history helped me understand how they got to "today" and why the way they were with each other.

Great fic!

casi_casi January 21 2011, 06:11:45 UTC

Showing their history helped me understand how they got to "today" and why the way they were with each other.
Oh, I'm so, so glad to hear this. Thank you so much. Your comment is so helpful and constructive and I really, really appreciate the feedback. Thank you. ♥

sumrndmgrl January 21 2011, 06:39:17 UTC

Anytime :) Keep up the good work!

jungle_moon January 20 2011, 17:47:31 UTC

God, I love this! I just..can't help but loving this SOOOO MUCH!!! ;D

I was afraid that this fic will be another heartbreaking story about this epic pairing..but Thank God it's NOT!!

Thank God for them to still willing to go through all of the obstacles and up and downs to keep their relationship together, alive..coz they so deserve each other!

You writing about them and all of their obstacles made their relationship to be as real as ever! I have to admit that it was so sad when David thought that Iker didn't want anything to do with him anymore after he moved away. And turns out it was IKER who made them work even after their far-away physical seperation - by going to David's home after that 1st Christman - and not so much David! HAha!

Oh my..I'm going to read this all over again coz I think I've missed some words when I was impatiently getting through the end to see whether they will/are still good and going to be together forever or not. XD

casi_casi January 21 2011, 06:13:13 UTC

Thank you so much for this very generous and constructive comment! I appreciate it so much. I'm so glad to hear that you found the story realistic and I'm delighted that you enjoyed it overall. <3

everyforever January 20 2011, 23:43:04 UTC

I'M SORRY THIS IS SO DELAYED!!!!

omg. omg this is sobeautiful & bittersweet & sad & gorgeous. the ending actually made me tear up.

i also loved:

"I -" David hesitated. "I think I love you," he said, his voice low, his eyes quite still and resting lightly on Iker's face. What David hadn't yet experienced in the two years that had passed, alongside a date, was what it felt like to say those words, or hear them in return.

oh my god, melting.

"Jesus, your Spanish has come some way over the summer," Iker said in a low voice, blushing deeply and trying in vain to maintain some façade of propriety. "Finish your salad, David."

THAT ENTIRE SCENE WAS SO GD HOT OANSFPOJSFOPAJFPOAJSFPOAJF!!!

"I've got you now," David whispered into Iker's ear.

oh my goajsdopsakfopajkfosapjfpaofj

I WISH I COULD GIVE YOU A BETTERCOMMENT. this is so lovely & beautiful & you write so,so well. reading your fics is like opening presents on christmas. you're lovely. :) ♥

casi_casi January 21 2011, 06:14:51 UTC

Not delayed at all!

Thank you so much, chérie. This is a genuinely lovely comment; you're very kind. I'm just so glad you liked it. ♥

reading your fics is like opening presents on christmas.
Oh my god, you. You're so gorgeous, thank you.

adorkably_silva January 22 2011, 17:13:10 UTC

oh my sweet jesus...
this is the most flawless fic i ever read. and believe me, this isn't even my favourite pairing.

idk what you do with the words, but you always manage to have such a beautiful, simple writing. in which one sentence is enough to explain the reader what is the basis of their relationship. and all the moments you described...

i think i never meant it when i said i was speachless before, but now i really do. <3

casi_casi January 24 2011, 02:03:41 UTC

Oh, wow, thank you so much! That's so immeasurably wonderful to hear. ♥

one sentence is enough to explain the reader what is the basis of their relationship
Ohhh, I'm so glad you think so.