EEEK! Epicness all over the place. This is so gorgeous. I literally JUST finished reading it on ff.net when I came on my flist and saw this at patrick_kat and I just flailed and had to come here and re-read it and flail some more. lol
This was perfection, I loved it so much. It reads very true to character and I just LOVE the voices, you really got them down, I think. The small little details are probably what kills me, like how you incorporate the show but still show us what's not shown and GR, I'm so not phrasing this right. You've officially turned my brain into mush, that's how good this is.
Okay, I'm re-reading this again, if I ever get my brain un-mushed I'll comment again. :)
This was pure perfection. Easily the best 10 things fic I've ever read and one of the best fanfiction piece period.
This line right here is my favorite: "What are you listening to?" she asks in a voice not too far above a whisper. Instead of answering, he holds out the spare earbud. She sticks it into her ear, and the two of them spend the rest of lunch not talking, just listening.
Actually, it's sort of nice."
and this too:
"Meet me on the roof, the whisperer says.
She doesn't look up. This way she can pretend she doesn't know who whispered in her ear. This way she can pretend that she's only going to the roof because, obviously, it will be quiet there.
She waits a few minutes, because she's not that eager, and manages to slip out unnoticed."
I love your style, almost drifty, a great, spot-on, in character "inner" Kat voice, just the right amount of italic and parenthesis use (I hate it when people over use these two things). It's not cheesy but it's still romantic
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This was perfection, I loved it so much. It reads very true to character and I just LOVE the voices, you really got them down, I think. The small little details are probably what kills me, like how you incorporate the show but still show us what's not shown and GR, I'm so not phrasing this right. You've officially turned my brain into mush, that's how good this is.
Okay, I'm re-reading this again, if I ever get my brain un-mushed I'll comment again. :)
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This line right here is my favorite:
"What are you listening to?" she asks in a voice not too far above a whisper. Instead of answering, he holds out the spare earbud. She sticks it into her ear, and the two of them spend the rest of lunch not talking, just listening.
Actually, it's sort of nice."
and this too:
"Meet me on the roof, the whisperer says.
She doesn't look up. This way she can pretend she doesn't know who whispered in her ear. This way she can pretend that she's only going to the roof because, obviously, it will be quiet there.
She waits a few minutes, because she's not that eager, and manages to slip out unnoticed."
I love your style, almost drifty, a great, spot-on, in character "inner" Kat voice, just the right amount of italic and parenthesis use (I hate it when people over use these two things). It's not cheesy but it's still romantic
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