Pinky Promises - Chapter 9

[catjahatter]

Even when Becker had woken up and finally been able to provide the names of his attackers, Fern and Connor had stayed put. Jess had raised her concerns about them knowing where Connor lived and that she wouldn’t be happy sending them home just yet. Especially as they had no way of knowing where they were since the tracker was no use now that the

Comments

[rusty_armour]

Just when I think that this story can't get any more heart-breaking...Holy Angst, Batman! Well, at least Becker and Jess are standing by Connor, and it looks like they have a way to track down Jack and his thugs. The tracker in the anomaly detector is a brilliant idea, btw. It's very Connor. :-)

Although this was filled with angst, you did describe the caravan fire beautifully:

The orange trailed to the woods behind the caravan and towards the shed tucked in the shadows that could no longer be cast. Ashes fell on them like snow, burnt notes and memories destroyed in an instant.

I also have to commend you for the wonderful way in which you described Connor's emotions during that scene. They were so raw and powerful. You really conveyed both the emotional and physical impact of a fire with your descriptions of Connor and Becker afterwards.

[catjahatter]

Heya! I thought I'd already replied to this comment, but obviously not. Sorry! Thank you once again for taking the time to read and your kind comments.

I am so nearly done with the next part and I should have it up soon. Catjahatter!