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cellshader

To Lift Any Burden (supernatural fic)

Sep 26, 2008 19:06

Title: To Lift Any Burden
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: It all belongs to Kripke & CW.
Summary: John is surprised after coming home from a hunt.
Word Count: 679

( It's about five in the morning, too early for the winter sun to be up, so it’s cold. John struggles to unlock the door with fumbling hands-hands numb and slick with a blood who's origin he can no longer identify. )

fic: supernatural, fic

Comments 16

vorrothiel September 27 2008, 01:13:51 UTC

aaaaaaaaaw Winchesters

:(

cellshader September 27 2008, 05:25:20 UTC

Aw. Yes. XD They are so very...themselves. ^_^

Thanks for reading.

may7fic September 27 2008, 03:42:02 UTC

Oh, this was a lovely look at John's mindset during this time.

He knows something of the life he could start by making it home for dinner. It’s a short life, and in a short time it ends with him coming back home to absolutely nothing at all.

No truer words were written. Thank-you for saying this so eloquently!

cellshader September 27 2008, 05:26:22 UTC

. Thank-you for saying this so eloquently!
Aw. *blush* thank you for saying so. This was a lovely comment. ^_^

Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed.

affinity8 September 27 2008, 12:15:37 UTC

I liked this a lot! I like Dean taking care of John with silence as well as comfort. The mac and cheese sounds yummy (but also kind gross maybe if you just blew off someone's head someone, and I suspected John wouldn't eat it). I bet the living room really is shit-hole and

The first line threw me off because five a.m. is too "early" for the sun to be up, not too late.

Overall nicely done - thanks for writing and sharing.

cellshader September 27 2008, 19:36:29 UTC

I'm glad you enjoyed! (and I must admit the mac and cheese was a bit more present cause I was hungry at the time. XD)

because five a.m. is too "early" for the sun to be up, not too late.
OMK, you're right! Thank you so much! I'll fix that now. :D

Thanks for reading!

maychorian September 27 2008, 13:41:00 UTC

I liked this little snapshot of Winchester life. Dean tries so hard, does everything he can to help his dad, and he's smart enough to recognize that John would rather be alone. And John is trying to hold it together, trying not to scare Dean with his own shakiness. I don't think John understands just how much Dean sees.

Lovey job.

cellshader September 27 2008, 19:38:31 UTC

Oh thank you. I'm glad that idea of Dean came across well. And I love that line you just used: I don't think John understands just how much Dean sees. You may have just inspired a whole new fic! :D

Thanks for reading. ^_^

embroiderama September 28 2008, 03:14:46 UTC

This is a really nice look at things through John's eyes. The weariness of it feels just right for him.

cellshader September 28 2008, 04:09:42 UTC

Thanks very much! I'm glad the characterization came through so well. ^_^

Thanks for reading.