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cellshader

Games They Play (heroes fic)

Oct 12, 2008 02:57

Title: Games They Play
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 2,166
Disclaimer: I own not a thing.
Summary: Mohinder and Elle face harsh realities of working for the Company.
A/N: This was written for the lovely widestance75 using her prompt: Confusion.

( When he finally meets her eyes she is giving him that classic look, the one that says she wants what she wants and she’ll get it if she has to use every bit of force to do so. )

fic: heroes, fic

Comments 16

be_understated October 12 2008, 09:26:38 UTC

I don't have time to read this right now, but I assure you in advance that your story is awesome. ^_^

cellshader October 12 2008, 21:15:55 UTC

Aw, *hugs* thanks babe. ^_^

antinous_wild October 15 2008, 00:48:28 UTC

Katie, I love you. XD

Anyway, this story is fantabulous and you should not take the lack of comments to heart, because it really is fantastic. I love the build-up, the subtlety of the characterizations, the lack of a happy ending -- in essence, the brutal reality of the whole situation, and how the characters navigate (or, ultimately, fail to navigate) the murky waters of the Company. The writing is nice and fluid, the story is complete but beautifully open-ended. I think you just did a wonderful job with this one, and I really wish more people would check it out, because it's one of your best works.. ♥

cellshader October 15 2008, 02:35:10 UTC

Aw. Thanks! Love u too. ^_^ ♥

*blush* Thank youuuuuuu. Hee. I can't tell you what a relief it was hearing that you liked this so much. ^_^ Srsly. Thanks. ♥

doh_rae_me October 15 2008, 01:26:13 UTC

Sooo the click here if you like Heroes worked so good on ya for the awesome trickery ;) ... Especially because it led to an equally awesome story. Mohinder is written really well and I enjoyed the development of the plot throughout, right down to the ending I didn't see coming. <3

cellshader October 15 2008, 02:38:36 UTC

Lolz. *blush* Yeeeeaaah. Haha. Thanks for reading, despite my...deviousness. XD

Aw, thanks.I'm super glad you enjoyed it so much! And I'm REALLY glad that the ending was such a surprise. ♥

thanks for reading! :)

widestance75 October 16 2008, 13:10:27 UTC

I'm so sorry I got to this so late - I wasn't checking LJ for a while. But thank you so much for writing it for me! I really like where you went with the prompt.

I liked Elle in this and my favorite sentence may have been: The urge to scuff them up and ruin their perfect surface is great, but she pushes it down by focusing on their pattern. It just made me smile.

I also love the open-endedness of the ending. Great job, dear! Thanks again!

Love!

cellshader October 16 2008, 23:55:07 UTC

Oh don't worry about it, I'm just glad you're back. :) And I'm VERY glad that you enjoyed! I have to admit it was too much fun. Thanks for requesting.

It just made me smile.
*g* thanks!

You're srsly too welcome. ♥

Love back!

Wonderful build up and interaction ml17 October 24 2008, 02:06:03 UTC

I really enjoyed this story. I love the juxtaposition of Elle's vulnerability [see below]

Daddy will be so ecstatic to hear that the formula’s finished ahead of schedule it will make up for all those horrible mistakes she’s made this past week. He may even take back a few of those threats, spewed out during disappointed lectures she pretends he didn’t mean. She’s finally done something right now.

with her brutality [see below]
“Fine. Go. And when you get back,” to emphasize her point, she thrusts a fistful of unchecked electricity into Mohinder’s face, “you can tell Daddy that if he wants the formula--” she stands now, breathing to calm herself a bit--a move that honestly renders him speechless.

She finishes “you tell him to come and get it personally.” I like how she feels that Mohinder is her "moral compass" and he is just as lost as she is! The story shows how they have a fragile trust that both want to cling to. I also appreciated that they both have serious daddy issues. *grin ( ... )

Re: Wonderful build up and interaction cellshader October 24 2008, 05:03:49 UTC

A sequal? Haha, I'll see what I can do...I must admit I really enjoyed writing their dynamic. ^_^

I really enjoyed this story.
Aw, thanks so much! I love hearing that, and I'm glad you did. ♥

thanks for reading!

perdiccas October 27 2008, 01:25:13 UTC

Wow, only just got around to reading this and it was intense. I really enjoyed it. A tragic take on their relationship that you don't often see in fic and I was shocked (in a good way) by how callous you'd made Bob. Hard life in the Company indeed.

cellshader October 27 2008, 01:39:57 UTC

Oh wow. Thank you so much! It's great to hear that it affected you like that, and that it was so fresh! I'm glad you liked. ^_^

Thanks for reading/commenting! ♥