VM Fic: The Things Guys Will Say... (Lilly/Piz, Logan/Veronica, Wallace, Mac) R

[celtic_flicka]

Title: The Things Guys Will Say

Comments

[afrocurl]

I'm with Merc on this one--I like Piz here, he's not some love-sick puppy who is chasing after the wrong girl. ;)

[celtic_flicka]

See? He could have been a good character. If only the writers had consulted with us... :)

[medjunkie]

Lilly and Piz shouldn't work, but some how they do, must be because of the way you write them so kudos to you :)
I think I said this when you did the earlier story but I think it's really interesting to think about what might have happened with Lilly if she had the chance to grow up. I think possibly if she had never been attacked she might have self destructed but like you have here, that kind of incident would make even Lilly Kane reassess her life

[celtic_flicka]

I've read a lot of fics where Lilly was never attacked, but I thought it would be interesting if she got a wakeup call about what she was doing. I'm glad that worked for you!

[encore828]

Great read. I remember really loving No Longer That Girl, it was nice to see a sequel

[celtic_flicka]

It's interesting that you say that, because an earlier version of this had a conversation with Lilly and Veronica instead of Logan. But I ended up going with Logan because Lilly and Logan had waaaay more baggage between them, so it was important to show how they got past that. With Veronica, it's easier to see how she would have forgiven Lilly right away.

I'm so glad you like the characterization of Lilly--what you've described is just what I had in mind for her, so I'm happy that came across!

[fleurlb]

Yeah, I liked this one even better than the first one. The voices are perfect and it walks a lovely fine line with the incident and the subsequent days. I love the way you're able to cover so much ground and so many feelings in a short span of time and with relatively few words.

Nice job. :)

[celtic_flicka]

Thanks. :) I'm always fighting the urge to get all exposition-y, so that the details can come out organically--since that's the kind of stuff I usually like to read.

[spygrrl76]

Love it! So glad you were inspired to write a follow-up. I think my favorite part was Lilly and Logan's conversation. It felt natural and a believable place for them if they had the opportunity to heal and grow-up.

[celtic_flicka]

Thanks--that was the part I worked on the most! Those two would have had so many issues between them, I decided that it had to be Logan to tell her everything was Ok now.