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[celticmuse5]

This is only my second CSI story, and I welcome criticism. My thanks to my betas EE and Linda, and the person who suggested my prompts

Comments

[burkesl17]

Gil's lines were really good, you have his voice down really well. I liked the sense of place and you worked the prompts in well, and the last line is just the perfect ending! Well done!

[celticmuse5]

Thanks for your comments, esp. about the last line. I was hoping for just that reaction.

[grissoms_girl]

Perfect, nice fic, great job

[celticmuse5]

Thanks!

[gjaneo]

Ah, yes, very good. I can see Gil and Catherine clashing over Nick, and Nick, of course, turning to Gil for guidance. And I like how you worked in the line from Evaluation Day.

[celticmuse5]

Ah, Evaluation Day. So much material for the Gil/Nick slasher. *eg*

Thanks for your comments.

[gjaneo]

Oh, mercy, yes! All those early episodes were loaded with potential slasher material.

[elmyraemilie]

You tweaked all the right tweaks--great finished product!

[celticmuse5]

Thanks EE! And thanks again for letting me spam your flist with my cut experiments.

Squee - Thanks

[moppig]

Its not often that I get a story written for me AND I get to like it too. But first I must apologise for my three words. I didn't realise they were going to be used as prompts and I was, ah, feeling rather contrary that day. So you did very well to use them without it sounding like you were whacking over the head with them.

My favourite line - But that Nick was being overwritten by a new version, the details of which were still unknown to Grissom,

it shows to me that Grave Danger can't be ignored but doesn't mean it have to ruin everything.

Squee thank you again.

Re: Squee - Thanks

[celticmuse5]

No, thank you for picking such inspiring words. I had almost no trouble fitting them in at all.

Glad you enjoyed your story.