Thank you! And I can't thank you enough again for your wonderful beta advice, it really did make a big difference, because it makes me think about everything I'm writing, which is a really good thing! :)
Ooh, I do like this! Very surreal and almost, I don't know, ~cold feeling. I'm intrigued to see where the story goes. Are you writing a novel/la or a collection of short stories or...?
Thank you! I'm glad that you enjoyed it. To answer your question, it's... an experiment. Each piece is connected by more than what you'd find in entirely separate short stories, and they are intended to be continuous... but I'm also trying to write it so that each week can be read by itself, too (and for each entry to still have an impact without relying on any prior knowledge, because in this Idol environment I can't expect readers to remember what they've previously read). I have to confess that it's much more difficult than I thought it would be!
Thank you for this, and I'm glad you like it! I think all your comments here are really perceptive. When I started this series I wondered about the formal nature of the tone, but I too feel that it's integral to the 'voice' of the narrator and overall tone of the piece... but I realise it's unconventional, and it's all subjective, and I think I'm okay with that! Your comment about the short sentences actually made smile, I'm not really a natural fiction writer and I think my short sentences have a certain origin in writing scripts! On a serious note, though, I will definitely pay attention to that.
Also, this: I am very new to writing and have no background in it, so likely I could be missing something important without realizing it.Don't devalue your own opinion so much! Your perceptions will, of course, be different from someone who has maybe more formal writing education but that doesn't mean that what you have to say is of any less value
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I am also a pretty big newb (cemetaria knows this already), but I wanted to say that I really liked the short sentences separated out and not mixed in with the paragraphs. The way it made the white space look on the page was pretty to me. :D
But then, when I write, I constantly have to remind myself not to write a million teensy paragraphs with one or two sentences in each one. Either that, or my paragraphs are these mega-paragraphs I end up having to break into smaller pieces. And I think you could have a point.
In this piece, I also liked the sentences as opposed to full paragraphs because it went with the idea of fragmentation the narrator kept mentioning.
Oh, and cemetaria, I think I owe you a response to your PM. Things have been crazified, but I did read it and appreciated it. :D
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I continue to love these and look forward to how this Keeper of the Dead's stories and thought unfold.
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Thank you so much for your kind comment :)
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I think all your comments here are really perceptive. When I started this series I wondered about the formal nature of the tone, but I too feel that it's integral to the 'voice' of the narrator and overall tone of the piece... but I realise it's unconventional, and it's all subjective, and I think I'm okay with that!
Your comment about the short sentences actually made smile, I'm not really a natural fiction writer and I think my short sentences have a certain origin in writing scripts! On a serious note, though, I will definitely pay attention to that.
Also, this: I am very new to writing and have no background in it, so likely I could be missing something important without realizing it.Don't devalue your own opinion so much! Your perceptions will, of course, be different from someone who has maybe more formal writing education but that doesn't mean that what you have to say is of any less value ( ... )
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But then, when I write, I constantly have to remind myself not to write a million teensy paragraphs with one or two sentences in each one. Either that, or my paragraphs are these mega-paragraphs I end up having to break into smaller pieces. And I think you could have a point.
In this piece, I also liked the sentences as opposed to full paragraphs because it went with the idea of fragmentation the narrator kept mentioning.
Oh, and cemetaria, I think I owe you a response to your PM. Things have been crazified, but I did read it and appreciated it. :D
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