Fic: You Forgave, and I Won't Forget (5/20)

[cgkm2099z]

Title: You Forgave, and I Won't Forget
Author: cgkm2099z
Pairing: Jeff/Annie
Spoilers: Current
Rating: PG-13
Warning Some language. Depends on whether you think "damn" and "hell" are curse words.
Word Count: 4,217
Disclaimer: I do not own Community. Community, and its characters, are the creation of the great Dan Harmon. I think it's still owned by

Comments

ohhhh, cruel!

[bethanyactually]

No conversation about Jeff and Annie's kiss, and then YOU BRING TROY BACK AT THE VERY END OF THE CHAPTER. Not cool. (But very effective!)

The scripted conversation between the Mayor and his Security Chief, and the descriptions of the expressions on Jeff's face, reminded me a lot of the conversation between Jeff and Annie in Conspiracy Theories, when Annie was pointing a gun at Jeff.

I look forward to the next chapter! :-)

RE: ohhhh, cruel!

[cgkm2099z]

Haha, well, I took notes from some other fics I've read on how to be mean to the readers :-P

I actually wasn't thinking of the Conspiracy Theories episode when I wrote that scene, but I can see what you mean. Though instead of Annie going off script to let Jeff know what he did wrong, it was Abed putting the words in her mouth. There are times when Jeff has hurt Annie where he's basically unaware of it, like in Basic Sandwich. But one thing that's been constant throughout the show is that when Jeff hurts Annie, and he knows it, well, it's the one thing he really can't stand.

As always, thanks for your comment :)

RE: ohhhh, cruel!

[bethanyactually]

You're welcome! And the fact that you weren't thinking of that conversation when you wrote this impresses me even more. Excellent characterization!

[mmcc194]

[cgkm2099z]

Thanks so much! I know there's no way I'm going to be able to incorporate everything from S6 into this fic, but I'll do what I can, as long as I think it makes sense.

As for your question about their playful flirting, I have sort of large scale ideas for where I want to go with things, so it's hard to say when and where something like that will be worked in. But with these two, it's something that's difficult to avoid :)

[loveobsessed999]

Um. A) that kiss scene was hot. Can we please have it in the show? Like, seriously.

B) WHY MUST YOU LEAVE ME HANGING LIKE THIS???

Are Jeff and Annie going to talk? Is Troy okay?

Update soon please!!!

Also I love how disappointed Jeff was by Annie Kim :D.

[cgkm2099z]

A) If Dan Harmon is reading this, he has my full permission to use it in the actual show. I do not require payment

[loveobsessed999]

A) I hope he takes you up on that offer!!

B) It was still cruel :P

Well, I'm glad he wasn't!!

Okay and you said I had a lot of projects-- that's A LOT. (Also your videos are super good always so I am looking forward to the next one.)

Lol, typical Abed. I loved that part too, and I definitely think that aspect particularly was 100% spot on characterization wise.

[cgkm2099z]

Haha, well I never said I didn't have a lot of projects going on :)

By the by, did you read parts 3 and 4? You hadn't commented on them so I was just curious. I'm especially interested in people's perception of part 4 and the Jeff/Britta conversation...

[cori_the_bloody]

H there. Sorry for the sudden drop off in reading/reviews. Illness. :P

Anyway, back to it:

"They were getting close now, and the butterflies in her stomach had apparently taken up the drums."
This was an exceptionally strong use of creative language, and I wanted to commend you for it.

Abed would write a script that perfectly captured Annie and Jeff's issues and then have them play the parts. That's such a perfectly Abed thing to do. I loved the Annie Kim fake-out and Troy at the end. I am super curious about the events leading up to Troy's arrest. I like that you took some of the details for the costumes from the earlier promo clips. I am also intrigued by how Shirley's dad getting sick is going to play into her involvement with the group.

And, of course, the kiss. I am dead. The family movie comment? Dead. Britta's text? Dead! A bunch of takes? DEAD. You describing where their hands went and all the other details. DEAD DEAD DEAD.
So, yeah, thanks for this.

[cgkm2099z]

Well first off, I hope you're feeling better!!

Second, thank you so much for your lovely comment!

"I am super curious about the events leading up to Troy's arrest"

The nice thing about picking up where you are, is that you don't have to wait for an answer :P

"And, of course, the kiss. I am dead. The family movie comment? Dead. Britta's text? Dead! A bunch of takes? DEAD. You describing where their hands went and all the other details. DEAD DEAD DEAD."

This made my day, thank you! Though I didn't mean to kill you so soon after you recovered from your illness...

Edit: "I like that you took some of the details for the costumes from the earlier promo clips."

Over on Fanfic.net, one guy asked me if I was a wizard. Apparently he forgot that those details were included in the S6 promo lol.

[cori_the_bloody]

Haha, that's hilarious. You should have pretended to be Dan Harmon or something.

[cgkm2099z]

I went with the Abed reply: "I have no psychic powers, I'm just an entertainer."