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Fic: You Forgave, and I Won't Forget (10/20)

May 13, 2015 20:39

Title: You Forgave, and I Won't Forget
Author: cgkm2099z
Pairing: Jeff/Annie
Spoilers: S5
Rating: PG-13
Warning Language
Word Count: 5,760
Disclaimer: I do not own Community. Community, and its characters, are the creation of the great Dan Harmon. I think it's still owned by Sony Pictures Television, but after the hack, I'm not so sure. The title ( Read more... )

jeff winger, community, jeff/annie, fanfiction, annie edison

Comments 27

ambrosefan23 May 14 2015, 01:12:27 UTC

This is just amazing.
I could definitely imagine Troy getting so caught up in the adventures of the journey that he would forget about the consequences of his actions
All characters were spot on.

cgkm2099z May 14 2015, 14:53:12 UTC

Thanks!! I was very worried about Annie and Jeff being in character for their argument, so I'm glad you liked it!

loveobsessed999 May 14 2015, 01:14:23 UTC

OH. MY. GOSH. Did that just happened? Please tell me that just happened.

That was amazing. I mean it was legit amazing. Like, Jeff and Annie's fight was obviously going to happen-- but Simmons' story and Annie telling Jeff to 'burn him', and you know all Annie ever has to do is ask.

And the kiss. The kiss was amazing. I want Jeff's pov though. And I love that it started out as a reverse of the Debate scenario, but continued with his FINALLY declaring his love it's just perfect. Please please please update soon.

Edit: I just noticed that Troy was shouting for joy-- he's such a shipper on deck.

cgkm2099z May 14 2015, 15:15:19 UTC

That. Just. Happened!
-Wait, what were we talking about?

I'm so glad you liked it. :) I was thinking that part of Annie's hangup (not the biggest part though) was her concern with being "better" than Simmons. And she didn't like the idea of him having the moral high ground over them. But after she saw that it's basically impossible to not be better than him, well that hangup was out the window haha.

And yes, regarding Troy. Like everyone else, he's seen the things going on between Annie and Jeff. And Troy loves his friends, so he's ecstatic to see them happy.

loveobsessed999 May 20 2015, 18:17:20 UTC

That. Just. Happened!
-Wait, what were we talking about?

Oh not much, just you know THAT CHAPTER OF AWESOME!!!

I'm so glad you liked it. :) I was thinking that part of Annie's hangup (not the biggest part though) was her concern with being "better" than Simmons. And she didn't like the idea of him having the moral high ground over them. But after she saw that it's basically impossible to not be better than him, well that hangup was out the window haha.

I always like it. And that makes sense, yeah :D. Let's be real, she cares more about beating Simmons than being 'right' in this instant.

And yes, regarding Troy. Like everyone else, he's seen the things going on between Annie and Jeff. And Troy loves his friends, so he's ecstatic to see them happy.

Now can we have him back for the big kiss that is coming in the season? Pleeease?

cgkm2099z May 21 2015, 17:32:42 UTC

Oh not much, just you know THAT CHAPTER OF AWESOME!!!

*blushes*

Now can we have him back for the big kiss that is coming in the season? Pleeease?

If only that were up to me. Dan has been perfectly clear about how much he wants Donald to return. I just wish Donald felt the same way :(

I want Jeff's pov though.

Ask, and ye shall receive.

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cgkm2099z May 14 2015, 15:16:29 UTC

Haha, thanks!! Believe it, though! Glad you enjoyed it :-)

jdp1979 May 14 2015, 05:38:20 UTC

You wanted me to comment, well now you're gonna get it! ;-)

I thought Simmons was beat waaaayyyy to easy. It drained the tension out of it...

Other than that, it was a really good chapter, again. Loved the J/A fight, that felt realistic from both sides.
Hope you update soon!

cgkm2099z May 14 2015, 15:59:38 UTC

You wanted me to comment, well now you're gonna get it! ;-)

Be careful what I wish for, huh?

I thought Simmons was beat waaaayyyy to easy.Fair enough. And I agree with you to a point. However, Jeff and Annie beat him rather easily in the debate; it wasn't until he went off book and launched himself out of his wheelchair that he had a shot at winning (excluding the opening where Jeff was blowing if off and Annie was in robot mode). So this time is was Troy and Jeff (with Annie's help in preparation) beating him easily. My problem was that I couldn't think of a similar Hail Mary for him to use this time - hence Annie's noting that it all seemed oddly anticlimactic ( ... )

jdp1979 May 14 2015, 17:36:28 UTC

I will now offer a 2 minute rebuttal...

You're right that Jeff and Annie beat him easily in Debate. But... that was Jeff and Annie aka the team. This was just Jeff.

But you have some good points, better to write it like this than try a Hail Mary that falls flat. And in the end, it's a J/A fic, not a Community episode, so it's all good.

And don't get me wrong, I really enjoyed it, just had this little nagging thought of "well, that was easy". Maybe the problem was that it was readily apparent from Jeff's opening statement that he was gonna wipe the floor with him. Maybe it could've worked slightly better if there was more of a buildup to that. Making the kiss (and Troy's reaction to it) the deciding moment.
Ha, now I've had another thought. What if the kiss was Jeff's equivalent of the Hail Mary? With Simmons not knowing how to respond (because he doesn't have an Annie with him) and being beaten...

Anyway, I still think it was really good, just a little constructive criticism. See, this is why I don't comment on fics! ;-)

cgkm2099z May 14 2015, 18:18:55 UTC

Anyway, I still think it was really good, just a little constructive criticism. See, this is why I don't comment on fics! ;-)No, no, by all means, I really do appreciate it. You did not offend me. Concrit is welcome, it keeps me from getting too full of myself haha. And I do agree, it would've been better if I had been able to come up with something to make the kiss the part that ultimately proved Simmons' case wrong, I just couldn't come up with a realistic way to have Simmons make a comeback (it would have helped if I knew more about law, but sadly I don't - could've maybe come up with something that way...). I wanted to keep the opening statement because it's this whole thing where Jeff used to be the super-lawyer (or, at least super-bullshitter haha), but after graduation, he lost his edge because he wasn't the same "monster" he used to be. But Simmons threatening Troy, combined with Annie finally giving him her blessing, leads to Jeff getting his mojo back. Sort of this idea that with Annie in his corner, Jeff can do anything ( ... )

bethanyactually May 14 2015, 07:24:28 UTC

But why did Troy know all the Australian history and Aboriginal farming techniques??? Did I miss something?

Jeff and Annie's fight was so very in-character, I wanted to weep for joy. And Annie telling Jeff to destroy Simmons...YES. SHE TOTALLY WOULD SAY THAT AND JEFF WOULD TOTALLY LEAP TALL BUILDINGS IN AN EFFORT TO MAKE IT HAPPEN.

I am SO looking forward to more!

cgkm2099z May 14 2015, 16:25:36 UTC

But why did Troy know all the Australian history and Aboriginal farming techniques??? Did I miss something?

You did not miss anything. Patience, patience, I will get there :-P

Jeff and Annie's fight was so very in-character, I wanted to weep for joy.

The early reviews are saying this, and I'm soooo glad to hear it! I was über nervous about keeping them both in character. My biggest conflict was with Annie. Would she be more concerned with her principles or with Troy? It's a difficult balance. I tried to play it as her being faithful to both, in a way. She wanted to mount a vigorous defense for Troy, but just not in the manner that Jeff had planned. And maybe she had tricked herself a little into thinking there was some magical legal solution that would allow her to completely achieve her goal of saving Troy while being 100% noble. But in the end, she saw that Simmons wasn't willing to play by the rules either, and it made it an easy decision for her to want to respond in kind.

And Annie telling Jeff to destroy Simmons...YES. SHE ( ... )