Concrit Post

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HOW'S MY DRIVING?

This is a concrit post. Any comments about my portrayal of Namine should be left here, or sent to me via email or AIM.
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Happy Playing!

Comments

[anonymous]

Okay, this isn't a flame at all, and that's probably a bad way to start this, huh? But I assure you, it's not. Just some good advice from someone who's seen some good Namines. Keep in mind, it's not that yours is particularly bad, it's just that the one constant I remember with any good Namine is her ability to evoke sympathy without being, well, for lack of a better word, annoying about it. Unfortunately, I find it hard to feel any compassion for your Namine with how aware she is of how potentially dangerous she can be and how much you seem to stress it from what I've read.

Namine is naive. Your portrayal of her seems a little too informed even when she's supposed to be confused and sometimes it just makes her come off as attitudinal. It's hard to feel sympathy for her at all, and Namine's one of those characters that should be able to suck it right out of you. Other than that, though? I'd say proofread. Proofreading goes a long way.

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Thanks a lot for the crit! I appreciate it, and I no worries I don't consider this a flame at all. It's very valid, and I see exactly where you're coming from