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Three-Star Royalty

May 19, 2013 22:14

Title: Three-Star Royalty
Rating: PG
Pairing: SuChen
Length: Oneshot (Approx. 3600~)
Summary: Junmyeon is a businessman staying at a luxurious hotel. Chen is the doorman who can't seem to do his job right.

( “This is where everything turns into a corny romance movie right? You apologize, I forgive you, we live happily ever after. All that jazz.” )

Comments 7

cxxarpexxd May 20 2013, 06:51:06 UTC

Whoa, this was splendid. I have absolutely no other words for this. I love how well you portrayed the characters and their interactions, as well as your abundant and fluid writing that contributed to the awesomeness of this story. I don't know which I liked more: Jongdae's sass or Joonmyeon's prudishness, and honestly, I have to say this is one of the best stories I have read. It was short and sweet and cute and absolutely amazing. Please continue to write!

hunhamburger May 20 2013, 08:07:55 UTC

I actually cried at this ;~; I'm so honored that you think so highly of it. Thank you so very much, your comment made my entire day (or night considering it's 2am here xD). I'm so happy. Thank you again for taking the time to read and leave such a wonderful comment! :3

grumpybiscuit May 20 2013, 09:25:25 UTC

i always have a disliking towards really rich people...they are very likely acting like a prude...and just because some of us do not think money really matters that much in life, doesn't mean we're useless. sorry, just have had an experience with this one really influential individual who thinks he's all that!

hunhamburger May 22 2013, 01:41:50 UTC

Aww D: Yeah prudes in real life can sometimes be really stuck up and not very nice people ;A;
Thank you for taking the time to comment!

theazaleable May 24 2013, 09:12:41 UTC

WAHHHHHHHH BASKING IN THE SUCHEN FICS EVERYONES BEEN WRITINGGGGGGG.

all of you spoil my suchen heart tbh.
ugh this was so cute and i love how feline chen is ok????
sobs i likeeeeeeed this!

hunhamburger May 25 2013, 05:09:04 UTC

Omg I'm so glad you liked it >< thank you so much for reading and leaving such a lovely comment!! ;uuuu; <3

forgetbackspace November 27 2015, 19:48:01 UTC

Junmyeon’s flight home was in just three more days, it had been four since he had last spoken to Chen. After mainly writing paper after paper holed up in his room, Junmyeon decided he needed some fresh air. He stepped out from the elevator, crossed the lobby, and stopped in front of the double doors. The older doorman reached out a hand to pull them open, but Junmyeon stopped him.

“It’s okay. I’ve got it.” He said quietly as he pulled on the heavy gold-bar handles for the first time, welcoming the rush of cool air.

There was so much emotion in that last line. I liked the characterization, but as you mentioned it was a little rushed :)
If next time you potentially made a plot like this a little longer to stretch tension, and maybe include more insight from chen's side of the situation, it would be an amazing oneshot!
Either way, I enjoyed reading it and will anticipate more :)